Majo to Kyurasu - Ch. 1 - First puff “Witches and Reunions”

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Ok this looks pretty good/interesting....Lmao at Tama just accepting the gay dream, she must've been holding it for so long....I hope we get to hear about the journey till today that they both went through when they separated, this is def going to be interesting and hopefully Tama gets to do what she did in the dream but in real life too lol
 
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Thanks for the chapter!
Oh yee, another Shibata Kouhei manga.
This one's starting off strong, I wonder how unhinged it'll get?
 
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@overunderthrust typos
Pg 2: amazing -> Amazing
Pg 3: And its with your help -> And it's with your help
Pg 4a: through out the country -> throughout the country
Pg 4b: An Island nation -> An island nation
Pg 6: Sien-san -> Shien-san
Pg 13: on her left brest -> on her left breast
Pg 17: popular now a days -> popular nowadays
Pg 19: a lot happen to me to -> a lot happened to me too
Pg 24a: how are relationship was -> how our relationship was
Pg 24b: Was... It really like this? -> Was... it really like this?
Pg 28: But your skills as a witch is so good -> But your skills as a witch are so good
Pg 30: Yes, Let's do this -> Yes, let's do this
 
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@overunderthrust typos
Pg 2: amazing -> Amazing
Pg 3: And its with your help -> And it's with your help
Pg 4a: through out the country -> throughout the country
Pg 4b: An Island nation -> An island nation
Pg 6: Sien-san -> Shien-san
Pg 13: on her left brest -> on her left breast
Pg 17: popular now a days -> popular nowadays
Pg 19: a lot happen to me to -> a lot happened to me too
Pg 24a: how are relationship was -> how our relationship was
Pg 24b: Was... It really like this? -> Was... it really like this?
Pg 28: But your skills as a witch is so good -> But your skills as a witch are so good
Pg 30: Yes, Let's do this -> Yes, let's do this
@overunderthrust If you guys are going to make these edits, I'd also suggest changing country/nation to kingdom or something since they didn't have those concepts back in 16th century Europe.
Also on p.18, the spell she chants is chinchin (penis) not the normal chichin. Suggesting "penis wenis go away" or something like that.
Other mistakes I've spotted:
P.3 "Seems that half of her friends have been burned at the stake" should be "Many (a majority) of our friends/colleagues/ us witches...", and "What kind of place would like to live" should be "What kind of place would you like to live in?"
P.7 "I've finally found them" should be "I've finally found it" (the apartment), and "But I was able to stay in one piece" should be something like "But I've managed to locate her".
 

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