not sure if i get your comment, but that message appeared at the beginning of chapter 1, it's like a memory of how they first metStrange, was this released somewhere before as I remember reading this chapter? I might misremember the rest, but I definitely remember page 11, that message and that he had seen it before and that they should meet at the astronomy club...
Ok slightly better than before, very good. There's more room for improvement on the style, so do take yer time making it look more "prettier" to read 👍I tried to work on my typesetting. I hope you find it better than the previous one. Let me know if it goes in the right direction
Seems like yet another indication of such powerful interest in each other that their true intentions can't help but keep leaking out.I'm actually a little surprised they've addressed the "will [Person Of Interest] continue chatting with the MC even after the conditions are done?" inquiry in this chapter, usually those don't become a problem until way later.
Definitely an improvement. Keep it up!I tried to work on my typesetting. I hope you find it better than the previous one. Let me know if it goes in the right direction