Modern MoGal - Big Game! - Ch. 2

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social credit vibes with that background check, yeesh
 
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You can feel that the author is not used to writing longer chapters and stories as it's jumping from one plot element to another very abruptly, and that some characters shoehorn wall of exposition text quite akwardly.

Well, the only way to get better is to keep at it and improve so I hope he/she will work on transitions, techniques of "show don't tell", and story rythm and flow.
And that, along this story develloppement, we will see him/her improve...
 
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@Felipo

No.

Part 3 has not been uploaded here yet but it is on webtoons, and I'm actually working on the 1st draft of the english script for part 4 so I can tell you for sure there's more coming down the pipe.
 
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i dont care author, i am reading 'MR' as 'Mister' and that's final
 
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The whole "You have to be someone strong to be a writer in my paper", how do I say this?... It's fucking stupid...
 

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