One Morning I Woke Up

[Beymaster]

This is a good story, but I still have a few issues

The first issue I have is the info dump near the end (talking about her acting like a delinquint in the past and so on) which is not very handled all things considered, second is the cut from the school to the hospital, it's a decent twist but it feels very lacking in development or build up.

But those things aside this is still a really good story and probably one of my favorite one-shots, 9/10

 

[AngelHQ]

the ending is a bit cheesy but pverall its quite a nice small story

I know, right? When she went to the hospital at the end and the nurse was like "you don't have to visit anymore" and then he was there i was like "YOU F*CKING CLOWN!!!" but it was great. Yep, got a good tearjerker out of this (not my favorite genre tho)

 

[AngelHQ]

This is a good story, but I still have a few issues

The first issue I have is the info dump near the end (talking about her acting like a delinquint in the past and so on) which is not very handled all things considered, second is the cut from the school to the hospital, it's a decent twist but it feels very lacking in development or build up.

But those things aside this is still a really good story and probably one of my favorite one-shots, 9/10

I think that info dump was pretty well inserted, as it was in an emotional moment and concise enough. The twist though... The way that nurse talked was way too ambiguous for the situation and it would've put me out if was wasn't that invested.

Your point is pretty fair, though. I think one could complain for both points (and be a bitch for that) but still, fair enough.

 

[AngelHQ]

This felt like copout ending. I get that tragic endings are not always the answer, but this story really earned the predictable tragic ending. Disapointing

Wait, if it's predictable, should it happen exactly like that? I'd call for a twist to add up for this twist... Like he could come back for the day or could not but she can summon him with her song.

 

[jonnywarlock]

Well...

Spoiler

My God, I was about to tear up right before the end. Then the other twist happened and all was right in the world again.

 

[ganigabe0]