Onna Tomodachi wa Tanomeba Igai to Yarasetekureru - Vol. 1 Ch. 1

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Well, I can appreciate the effort. There were a couple rough spots, sure, but you're already self-aware about that so I won't harp you on that.

The one that really stuck out to me was about her boobs "growing back;" which probably should be "grew again." That would mean simply going from one size to a larger size, while "growing back" would imply that they were once a larger size, then shrank down, then became larger again.
 
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Well, I can appreciate the effort. There were a couple rough spots, sure, but you're already self-aware about that so I won't harp you on that.

The one that really stuck out to me was about her boobs "growing back;" which probably should be "grew again." That would mean simply going from one size to a larger size, while "growing back" would imply that they were once a larger size, then shrank down, then became larger again.
I forgot to change that lol, it should be fixed now. Thank you for your advice
 
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This has even more wish fulfillment than the average isekai, my guy just has women throwing themselves at him
 
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School life.... even tho I searched for things without it.... and honestly the interactions just feel like a bad porno
 
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Pretty sure her name is Hazuki? or am I mistaken? The furigana is はづき after all
 

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