Ookami wa Tsuki ni Koi wo Suru - Ch. 21

[MangaDex]

 

[kuronotenshi]

 

[Remonaka]

I want justice for so many childhood friends being the 'losing heroines'.

It's always the homewreckers

 

[Randalmize]

I will not "forget" about them being cousins. It's what makes it peak. Says Shelbyville 😁

 

[1orangebraincell]

Holy shot!! Why is art so good? And importantly story is also good. It's not like takamine-San which has godly art but with absolute dogshit story.

 

[Andasen]

I sensed a character arc for those two

 

[Kyrax0]

Hey I know those eyes...

 

[Este074]

Siblings is weird, but i can accept cousins. But really im ok with both, fictionally

 

[AdmiralSilver]

p. 5: "sparined" -> "sprained"
p. 9: "even if, everything..." -> "even if everything..."

 

[aphobia]

p. 5: "sparined" -> "sprained"
p. 9: "even if, everything..." -> "even if everything..."

Thanks so much! I'll go fix sprained.
For 'even if,' that was a stylistic choice for pacing. Do you think it doesn't flow well?

 

[AdmiralSilver]

Thanks so much! I'll go fix sprained.
For 'even if,' that was a stylistic choice for pacing. Do you think it doesn't flow well?

Oh okay. I get the pacing style you're going for; that makes sense now. Although, in English grammar, I don't think I've come across the comma (,) being used like that because while it does signal a pause, it also disconnects it into two statements in a sentence. So, as a native English speaker, I didn't catch onto it being a dramatic pause and thought it was splitting the quote in two. Perhaps an ellipsis (...) would work better. Idk

 

[AdmiralSilver]

Oh okay. I get the pacing style you're going for; that makes sense now. Although, in English grammar, I don't think I've come across the comma (,) being used like that because while it does signal a pause, it also disconnects it into two statements in a sentence. So, as a native English speaker, I didn't catch onto it being a dramatic pause and thought it was splitting the quote in two. Perhaps an ellipsis (...) would work better. Idk

Wait, I've got it. A comma on both ends would likely do the trick without taking up too much space- "even if, everything I did, ..." or something like that