Otonari no Tenshi-sama ni Itsu no Ma ni ka Dame Ningen ni Sareteita Ken - Vol. 1 Ch. 1.2
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He probs only realize he is sick after coming to school or midclass. And he said it himself that he rushes back home afterwards.
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This guy really selling himself low. He is quite a catch for a guy.
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i just want more realistic dialogue in this. like nothing anyone says is even remotely real. it's ok, i come here to do escapism anyway, but yknow.
"bro you are sick"
"no u"
"ew get ur rona ass away from me bro why'd you come to school"
"we got class? hello??"
"ok then why'd you get sick idiot"
"i lent my umbrella yesterday"
"to who"
"a...a lost child"
"sure buddy any child would be running at the sight of you"
ok wait so like
the conversation is a bunch of tell (instead of show)
like instead of SAYING "oh your room is messy and you eat combini food every day"
just show that. like have him go to his messy room with family mart chicken and we can see that.
show don't tell
yeah and that's why i don't like this convo
"bro you are sick"
"no u"
"ew get ur rona ass away from me bro why'd you come to school"
"we got class? hello??"
"ok then why'd you get sick idiot"
"i lent my umbrella yesterday"
"to who"
"a...a lost child"
"sure buddy any child would be running at the sight of you"
ok wait so like
the conversation is a bunch of tell (instead of show)
like instead of SAYING "oh your room is messy and you eat combini food every day"
just show that. like have him go to his messy room with family mart chicken and we can see that.
show don't tell
yeah and that's why i don't like this convo
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