First comment on the rewrite too! Gotta say, while there's still a few obvious typos (eg. "Quess") and some sentence structures that feel a bit off, a bit of missing grammar here and there... it reads much, MUCH better now, and is much more understandable at any given moment reading through it (which I'll be one of the first to acknowledge can be troublesome, given the twisty nature of the dialogue at times). Thanks for putting in that extra time to make it that much more readable.