Return of the Legend

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it was fun to read only if he doesn't let himself be so horny for highschoolers. it was hilarious yet cringey the way he was flustered of two highschool beauties fighting for him... in front of him.
also he keeps telling his younger sister to practice acting cute/aegyo ???
like wtf man why would you say that. that's not how an old man should act and speak.
 
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Good early on. Devolved into a non-commital harem fic with ntr feels. If anyone takes bits a away from this, be less horny, make the secret society make since in the foreshadowing/side, and stretch the early game out a little bit more to showcase some form of struggle..... and don't have multiple reincarnated/traders in a modern fic unless you make the story drastically different from their supposed past.
 

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