Sekinin Motte ne? Tojo-san - Oneshot

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@FearlessBlue typos
Pg 6: it's 100th anniversary -> its 100th anniversary
Pg 7: His unique looks makes him -> His unique looks make him
Pg 9: student concil president -> student council president
Pg 12: With human -> With humans
Pg 14: secreting "endorphin" and "serotonin" -> secreting "endorphins" and "serotonin"
Pg 19: if you dont just turn me down -> if you don't just turn me down
Pg 21: Try to avoid hyphenating a word twice (respon-sibi-lity)
Pg 22: Try to hyphenate on syllable boundaries. 'surpri-sed' is a bit awkward, try splitting up 'apology' instead
Pg 25: so much effort tho' -> so much effort though
Pg 26: Same point as Pg 22, try 'announce-ment' instead
 
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Me, having to read this guy's dialogue:
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Ah yes, good work principal matchmaking the serious girl with the careless playboy... Whats the saying, putting a flower in cow dung? Sure lets go with that, close enough.

In the end it looked like the guy was reforming and actually helping with the consultations but it wasn't very clear.
 
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@FearlessBlue typos
Pg 6: it's 100th anniversary -> its 100th anniversary
Pg 7: His unique looks makes him -> His unique looks make him
Pg 9: student concil president -> student council president
Pg 12: With human -> With humans
Pg 14: secreting "endorphin" and "serotonin" -> secreting "endorphins" and "serotonin"
Pg 19: if you dont just turn me down -> if you don't just turn me down
Pg 21: Try to avoid hyphenating a word twice (respon-sibi-lity)
Pg 22: Try to hyphenate on syllable boundaries. 'surpri-sed' is a bit awkward, try splitting up 'apology' instead
Pg 25: so much effort tho' -> so much effort though
Pg 26: Same point as Pg 22, try 'announce-ment' instead
Thank you. Will fix it (y)
 
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don't know exactly why, but this is icky
 

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