thanks to all the advices, I'm trying to improve. thanks for reading.Both TL and typesetting have improved considerably. I could give you a lot of pedantic advice on how to improve, but you seem to be already going in the right direction on your own, so... just keep going that way. Thank you for your work.
Yeah nah, now unless he too becomes immortal or she becomes mortal, this will have a bitersweet ending..She's immortal? That's a heavy topic.