Ok, again, I appreciate the effort, but did someone REALLY proofread this? Just take page 16 as one example- it's painfully obvious that the text there is supposed to refer to Liliana herself: "Lilliana is not a bad person, she's just bad at being honest". And that's just the first thing to come to mind, there is a LOT wrong with this TL.
Heck, if you guys are really trying and can't figure out where you go wrong, I volunteer to proofread your proofreading. Every little bit helps.