You did a damn good job translating this. Of the 13 pages, I only found one poorly translated speech bubble: page 4 where she says "We're really need this stuff." Two choices that would have worked better: "We really need this stuff," would work, but the nuance I pick up, "We're really in need of this stuff"
Aside from that (a couple letters off ) You did a fabulous job. Being an old guy with poor eyesight, I like the font type and the redraw was top notch!
great job!