Sword, Tiara and High Heels - Vol. 3 Ch. 14

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Page 3 Panel 1, I know both mean I, but it better to just make it "I ... I(Male/M)" since usually this kind of thing will be important down the line in this kind of manga. Also Panel 2 probably "What am I doing?" is more correct than "what have you done?". Panel 3 "I can't help but feel angry at my own powerlessness." is probably more correct. Panel 4 "It's frustrating" or just "frustrating" is probably more correct when you look at all other panel than regret. CMIIW.
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Page 3 Panel 1, I know both mean I, but it better to just make it "I ... I(Male/M)" since usually this kind of thing will be important down the line in this kind of manga. Also Panel 2 probably "What am I doing?" is more correct than "what have you done?". Panel 3 "I can't help but feel angry at my own powerlessness." is probably more correct. Panel 4 "It's frustrating" or just "frustrating" is probably more correct when you look at all other panel than regret. CMIIW.
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Sounds about right, I would use the phrase "What am I even doing" instead of "What am I doing" so it sounds more like a rhetorical question, to keep the original meaning
 
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the novel of this has gl and bl in the keywords, why is this not tagged as such? it should also have the gore tag, it should be changed.

edit: the bl and gl are the first keywords on syosetu btw
 
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Any news for this one update? I have plan to pick this up if not. Pretty cool story ngl, mc is not total op at all, she has clear motivation, clear objective, even family actually do something beside just show up for few chapters. She also have flaw and weak. But man, last updated 7 months ago, really sad
 

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