The TL notes are cringey and your English is horrific. Your “fixed” translations/re-translations aren’t any better. Either work on a small team with native english speakers doing TL checks and doing proof-reading or don’t do it at all.
I’d rather get nothing than get trash like this.
AI translations are getting dangerously good (depending on model and whether they are human-aided), it’s just a matter of time before TLs like this are left in the dustbin of history.