On the first page you had Millet refer to herself and her sister as "they" instead of "we" and "them" instead of "us". The next panel had Al saying "...I think I worried them" where it should have been "...I think I worried you"
On page 3, the village chief probably meant to say either "she" or "Millet" told him that Al had "a request", rather than "an request"
An page 8 Vivi should be saying "...I did most of the work"
This is nice, this can be made into an anime (fortunately)
A Slice of Life Isekai... Yeah that needs to be a thing in anime cause there are are barely any isekai animes with a well-known reputation for being a Slice of Life Isekai