Toki Majutsushi no Tsuyokute New Game ~Kako ni Modotte Sekai Saikyou kara Yarinaosu~ - Vol. 1 Ch. 2.2 - Everyday Lost- Part II

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Feels like a generic isekai/fantasy manga that can't properly set the pace of the plot. Author need to learn how to make a better panelling
Yeah it feels like I could have literally written this chapter into 2 or 3 pages (And yes I mean .1 and .2 combined)
 
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Must've been one hell of a cataclysm if it took down a sword saint and what appears to be some sort of magical prodigy I'm guessing.

But really we've set up that the incident is right around the corner, I wonder how much more setup and "Jojo! My power stops time for 5 seconds! Let me ramble on for half the episode!" talking is a free action we're going to get before the clock strikes oh-shit-o'clock.
 
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Yeah it feels like I could have literally written this chapter into 2 or 3 pages (And yes I mean .1 and .2 combined)
Is what you meant how little the content of this chapter 2 is that you can reduce the pages somewhat? I honestly didn't quite get what you meant sorry.

What i complained is focused on this chapter 2.2 actually. I can't really remember past chapters because i would reread past chapters if i think it's important/fun/interesting to do so.

Anyway, the problem is this is not a proper set up. I can forgive past chapters because it needs time to do proper set up. But this chapter introduced NEW CHARACTER too soon. Why would the author need to do that when the previous event barely make the reader remember the previous cast (the family)? This chapter introduced the father as a swordsman teacher to the mc. Is he strong or not? Is he important to the story or not? It wasn't clear. And the father's comment to mc about mc's skill is very trashy comment. Is he lived 100 years for him have proper judgment exactly that? There is still questionable things to the family but the author chose new character introduction as the cliffhanger. Why would the reader would care about that?

That is why if the panelling was good, the reader would feel closeness to the family. And if the reader feel that the need to protect them for the so-called disaster would occur. Introducing new important character this soon is a bad idea and it is more worse to put that in the end of the chapter.. Many SOL manga do better panelling than this manga and this manga actually brave enough to do messy set up in a more serious toned manga. This theme is not that forgiving to give the chance to cover the mistakes
 
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I suppose that the monsters in the great calamity were all screaming (in monster talk): go explode normies, or an equivalent expression.
 
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Ooooh, I know how this is going. Next thing you know, Elle is Brunette and Labyris (Twintail girl) will be a Blonde. It's obvious how she's gonna be a tsundere love rival and he'll have a hard time explaining shit when the "great calamity" happens
 
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Guten Tag everyone, I come from the future. I am here to stop the murder of a woman by a mechanical being from an isekai world, which was sent back from the future to kill the woman, who will give birth to a boy who drives around a truck as an adult and sends people to isekai worlds by running them over. You see, if the boy is never born, then the truck won't send enough Japanese transmigrantors to isekai worlds, and they won't invent Japanese toilets that makes butt holes smell like flowers after pooping. So the king of my world send me to make sure the boy can continue killing Japanese people with his truck. The court mage determined that I was somehow the father of the boy by some kind of timeline causality, so the mage turned me into an incubus with the ability to charm females into playing with my peepee. I have to peepee into this woman to give birth to the isekai truck-kun driver. But my peepee also has the power to extend the lifeforce of the people I put it into, give them magic skills, level them up, and to defeat the demon lord. Please wish me luck. Dead or carrots. Signing out.
 
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here comes the cliche tsundere former fiancé before being disowned character. i wonder just how cliche we can get before chapter 5.
 
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Why author-san still bother with setting up tsundere love rival? Cliche and tiring at this point. Well, let's see if this "great calamity" setup is doing well as the core background.
 
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Its abit late but honestly bewildered at the hate this manga is receiving. Compared to many other manga as of late, this is still much better and less cliched IMO. The art is there, and plot wise, yes, its the cliche reincarnation, but its more tidy. On its own its not that good, but relatively better than its peers
 
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ah yes the hairstyle that exudes "i'm a pain in the ass to socialize with", twintails.
 

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