Trapped in a Webnovel as a Good for Nothing - Ch. 2

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"I would like to become a giant..."

*facepalm*

Is it just me, or does that sound so....corny...? 😩
 
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@Yunwu it does, and it doesn't. You have to remember this is a monologue that some of us do with ourselves, which is normal. Right now, he is facing fate itself and is talking sincerely for the minor character's feelings and as himself who was transmigrated to a new world/universe. This is for the reader's sake. I mean I got moved maybe cuz I went thru some hardship and reminded me to it? /shrug
 
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@Darkwolfix No, I get that. I get it. It's just...it felt a little lackluster...? I think he could have worded it better. "Giant" just doesn't sound nice. For example: "I...will become an existence that stands above everyone." Or something like that would have sounded better in my opinion.
 
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@Yunwu oh I know. but too much words make the readers [of mangas and manhwas] uninterested LOL. Most like drawings and short sentences. I read many readers complaining when the translator and proofreader use more than one word to express a sentiment. It would have become better to say a titan, in my opinion, if he wanted to use just one word. Transcend. Maybe rephrase the sentence.

You can always use your imagination and change into whatever phrase you would like better heh. I do that a lot with the stories I read, books, novels, or this type of books.
 
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@Darkwolfix Yeah, lol, I know most readers like shorter sentences. But my rephrase wasn't that long, was it? And yeah, I mean I think anything else would have been better than 'giant'. Like god or monster.

Well, it doesn't really change my favorability of this mana. I still like it and think it is interesting.
 
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@Yunwu yes I agree with you xD. I hope we get to see where the story goes. I tried to look for the novel but can't find it. I am guessing no one has translated., I wanna know what is going to happen while I wait for the manhwa > <
 
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Those were some good expressions. I wasn't expected much from this, but damn this had some good impact.
 
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The artist does a really good job with his desperation. He actually feels and shows fear, instead of just hiding behind a cool façade. Neat.
 

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