Unmei wa Yaku ni Tatanai - Ch. 4

[PixelCrow12]

Gotta love the "the string is hamstringing the plot" or "the string is messing up the progression of the story" comments because they are implying that the story would've worked better without it. Guys, without the string, this story doesn't exist at all. String is quite literally the central piece of the narrative and everything revolves around it.

If you don't like the set-up around the string and worldbuilding related to it and how it changes the dynamic of relationships then this story simply isn't for you. If you think that the story would've worked better without the string, you simply want a completely different story and not this one

 

[b58]

Gotta love the "the string is hamstringing the plot" or "the string is messing up the progression of the story" comments because they are implying that the story would've worked better without it. Guys, without the string, this story doesn't exist at all. String is quite literally the central piece of the narrative and everything revolves around it.

If you don't like the set-up around the string and worldbuilding related to it and how it changes the dynamic of relationships then this story simply isn't for you. If you think that the story would've worked better without the string, you simply want a completely different story and not this one

"If you don't like it, don't discuss it" comments like this one contribute absolutely nothing and just stifle interesting discussions. You're basically saying that you can't criticise a story because any changes to it would make it a different story and therefore we should just shut up I guess. There's obviously plenty of directions the story could take with the same basic premise.

We can both acknowledge the premise (and that it's quite interesting!) and we can speculate on how it could develop in next chapters, and whether the author wrote themselves into a corner or not. I'm inclined to agree with some other commenters that they kinda did, but I'm cautiously hopeful. In the worst case we will just get relatively standard yuri with a touch of supernatural that doesn't really matter that much, which I will probably still enjoy, but it doesn't mean I can't wish it to be better

 

[Tofufuyu0112]

I just hope Kouhai-chan doesn't get weird idea about trying to broke the fate red string by liking someone else just to prove the string doesn't work...

 

[pureyurionly]

so sweet so cute and pure

 

[brisketsweep]

I really like this story so far, and this chapter was incredibly good. Amamiya’s perspective was really well made to display her thoughts, physically taking up space in her mind and momentarily interrupting her perception of reality. It’s something I can really relate to, and it’s presented with a lot of care, without having everyone around her treat comically bad, but still not making everyone suddenly sound like they’re an example from a tutorial on how to talk to your friends with autism or something.

Furthermore… I like what the story is doing with the string. Thus far it feels kind of like it’s being used for a critique of heteronormative dating culture. Most people view the strong as “The Package,” which is dating, kissing, marrying, having sex, living together, having kids, blah blah blah. Maybe with sex and marriage being switched or dating and kissing being switched. But those are tweaks made to the standard dating package.
What Amamiya feels, as love, doesn’t fit what someone in love “should” feel. She doesn’t hold herself back from kissing or hugging Tsumugi, she’s not uncomfortable getting no physical affection. She just enjoys being around the girl she loves even more now.
Tsumugi, on the other hand, is a 15 year old girl who just had the older girl she admires deeply (who she knows doesn’t care for romance), suddenly confess to her. Of course she’s going to be shocked, because she’s relied on Amamiya to not push her into the box of dating and be someone she can talk to about the kind of love which is outside of the social norm now. What Tsumugi hates clearly isn’t getting into a relationship with Amamiya, it’s being pushed into a relationship where she’s forced to go through the steps of a “normal” relationship.
It’s also really telling that she didn’t know the string can appear for same-sex couples, which makes me feel even more strongly that the string, as interpreted by the people of this world, has simply been interpreted a certain way, and the dominant idea of romance is heterosexual, thus any gay romance would be strange.

I really like it!

 

[evandark]

The issue here is that the story has nowhere to go. The string, as so far it has been presented, is permanent. It works so well that even fiction has stopped making "stringless love stories."

Basically, the whole story hinges on Tsumugi's reluctance to accept reality. Now, to throw even more of a wrench on the story, we have this little chapter with Amamiya basically saying "status quo rocks, actually."

Yeah, I'm done here.

You know not every story needs to become a 200+ chapter soap opera, with love triangles, cheating, misunderstanding and betrayal. Yes, the story has a very predictable ending. So does every James Bond movie (believe it or not the villain neeever wins).

And the funny thing is, with or without the red string, the story progression would be the same. Girl falls for girl, pursues her and makes her slowly fall for her. We've seen it a billion times. The red string isn't even an obstacle yet, Tsumugi still needs to fall for her Sempai, string or no string.

I'm interested where they go with this string idea. So far the string seems to be working as a confirmation, once one party falls is love the string appears to confirm, that they fall for the one.

 

[Kamui]

You know not every story needs to become a 200+ chapter soap opera, with love triangles, cheating, misunderstanding and betrayal. Yes, the story has a very predictable ending. So does every James Bond movie (believe it or not the villain neeever wins).

And the funny thing is, with or without the red string, the story progression would be the same. Girl falls for girl, pursues her and makes her slowly fall for her. We've seen it a billion times. The red string isn't even an obstacle yet, Tsumugi still needs to fall for her Sempai, string or no string.

I'm interested where they go with this string idea. So far the string seems to be working as a confirmation, once one party falls is love the string appears to confirm, that they fall for the one.

I don't know why you felt the need to reply to the person who explicitly said was done with this dumb manga. I didn't say anything about length or drama or whatever the fuck you seem to believe I did or imply.

And that's all I have to say. Once again, I'm done with this story.