Nice one. Translations seem natural for me, TLN's are to the point. Also these wonderful jokes, like "genius Tanaka" or "and then comes your wedding" are perfectly transmitted. The only I didn't understand, what did they mean by "careful talker". And somewhere I've seen "to much" instead of "too much".
Nice choice for fonts too. Personally for me, anything is good as far as it's appropriate and not irritating
Series itself is fine. These cliché turns, like "they're simply my friends, we were going to have lunch together" are way too obvious, but I guess it's my own fault for reading too much manga. In general, the level of chaos and destruction is similar to
my favourite. So, I think I'll follow this.
But yeah, this number of pages is no joke. Take your time, or even better - push all edit work at someone
else willing to help.
Anyways, good luck and have fun, I'll be watching
Provocation: don't you want to replace 心 with "heart voice" each time?