@PersonalistX Hey there~
Note for page 2: You shouldn't simply delete sfx like laughter etc. without translating them, not translating them is fine they are often self explaining but to simply delete them is a error. To be concise
the deleted sfx on page 2 was "Fuhaha" also on
page 2 is a sentence outside the bubbles deleted without being translated which is "I wanted to wear my new shoes..."
On page 8 was a sentence shortened from "I'm not confident that in a few years i'll be able to instinctively use magic in front of a dragon..." to "I'd never be able to cast that spell in time." (Shortening sentences is a no-no.)(Actuually i often noticed you shortening sentences you should really stay true to the raws and not simplify them to a point of cutting out parts of the sentence)
On page 15 another error in the panel word sword boy says "ohhh, right." Mc thinks "His hand?" outside the bubble which was deleted.
And in the next panel mc says: "Sword calluses...?" which plush ears answers with "He should have them if he wields a sword."
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Hope this helps and doesn't cause you to swear eternal vengeance against me... 😅
Otherwise thanks for the chapter and see you later~
Btw sorry for your patreon acc, might be good to re-open another and make it seem like it's to support your career as artist.