Well you did a good job with the emotional investment, I really want to see if Yue will be alright at the end and why the classmate even cares.
Advice? I guess you could do more with the hairstyles or clothing accessories to make the characters more unique, I really like the cover, I thought her hair would be more wild like that in the actual manga, I like to draw too but a manga is a lot of work! I haven't gone that far yet, so is very admirable, keep it up!