World of Lysos: Moro the Immortal - Vol. 1 Ch. 2 - Moro's Lysos

[MangaDex]

 

[Parnifia]

That last page is a textbook example of how not to write dialogue. You can't just throw walls of... Whatever that dialogue is, at the reader and expect them to care. Find a way to shorten it or spread it out further.

 

[Staryoshi]

That last page is a textbook example of how not to write dialogue. You can't just throw walls of... Whatever that dialogue is, at the reader and expect them to care. Find a way to shorten it or spread it out further.

Yeah, I realized how bad it was after writing it. I'll make sure to be more mindful to the amount of text on one page in the future.

 

[Nami]

Yeah, I realized how bad it was after writing it. I'll make sure to be more mindful to the amount of text on one page in the future.

Found you here from your post on Reddit today.

This comic isn't really my cup of tea (though it wouldn't be even if it were written better), but I'm following it now 'cause I'm invested in seeing you improve. Don't ignore the criticisms you've gotten, but don't get too down about them, either. People can be overly mean sometimes, but if you're actually passionate about doing this, you can also learn to improve.

 

[aznelven]

Steven, wtf did you make me read
I hate you Steven

 

[Staryoshi]

Found you here from your post on Reddit today.

This comic isn't really my cup of tea (though it wouldn't be even if it were written better), but I'm following it now 'cause I'm invested in seeing you improve. Don't ignore the criticisms you've gotten, but don't get too down about them, either. People can be overly mean sometimes, but if you're actually passionate about doing this, you can also learn to improve.

Thank you. I do have a lot of work to do when it comes to improving. I'm trying not to get down about the comments, but I have taken them to heart to improve. And like I told myself, this is a project purely of passion. So I'm trying not to take the negativity too seriously.