Youheidan no Ryouriban - Ch. 2.2

[MangaDex]

 

[lzsei]

Hahaha from all the things she's questioning how he maintain his skin lmao, ty for ch

 

[spawnknight]

I have never seen a native give such a detailed description of an isekai's clothes before in all my years of reading the gene!

 

[Assaultsquirt]

I mean, while it's actually really cool for an author to point out how people in less advanced cultures would find our modern clothes astonishing, I don't think it's cool enough to spend 10 pages on it. The author has his heart in the right place with imagining a more "realistic" fantasy world and creating chthonic feeling characters, but he needs some experience in pacing and character writing.

I will be looking forward to what he puts out in the future. This is a solid 8/10. If the Redo of Healer author can go from making a 4/10 in his first work to an 8.5/10 in his second work, this guy has a bright future.

 

[gr2222]

I mean, while it's actually really cool for an author to point out how people in less advanced cultures would find our modern clothes astonishing, I don't think it's cool enough to spend 10 pages on it. The author has his heart in the right place with imagining a more "realistic" fantasy world and creating chthonic feeling characters, but he needs some experience in pacing and character writing.

I will be looking forward to what he puts out in the future. This is a solid 8/10. If the Redo of Healer author can go from making a 4/10 in his first work to an 8.5/10 in his second work, this guy has a bright future.

it's more like a problem like when an author is forced to make chapters longer, it happens a lot, everyone hates that but sometimes there is no other choice if there is not enough time for the author to find a better way to make a chapter longer.

 

[Romisterie]

Hahaha from all the things she's questioning how he maintain his skin lmao, ty for ch

Strange thing considering being a chef is hard work enough to have callouses and scars.

 

[HaikenEdge]

Yeah, chapter 2 really should have been chapter 1.

 

[kirby_422]

Yeah, chapter 2 really should have been chapter 1.

idk, chapter 1 is required to be the hook to get people into it. This kinda feels like it should be a volume extra chapter 0 or something; it is the start of the story, but should be delivered when the people are already going to be getting the actual content of what the story should supposedly be about, cooking.

 

[HaikenEdge]

idk, chapter 1 is required to be the hook to get people into it. This kinda feels like it should be a volume extra chapter 0 or something; it is the start of the story, but should be delivered when the people are already going to be getting the actual content of what the story should supposedly be about, cooking.

I guess? Just narratively, it makes no sense as a chapter 2 because it kills any momentum chapter 1 was building.

 

[FloorRoof]

I mean, while it's actually really cool for an author to point out how people in less advanced cultures would find our modern clothes astonishing, I don't think it's cool enough to spend 10 pages on it.

It can work. Bouken ni wa is heavy on worldbuilding, but still manages to be interesting by focusing on telling stories with strong characters first and foremost.

 

[Assaultsquirt]

It can work. Bouken ni wa is heavy on worldbuilding, but still manages to be interesting by focusing on telling stories with strong characters first and foremost.

I don't mind worldbuilding one bit. One Punch Man, Frieren, and Dungeon Meshi are my #1, 2, and 3 manga of all time and aside from OPM, they all thrive on worldbuilding. There's a bit of a difference, though. Laios will go into autistic detail about how to kill and cook a goblin over the course of 3 or so highly detailed pages. This manga stretches it out over a large handful of pages with few illustrations to break up the monotony.

This author has a lot of interesting ideas but he needs to work on how he conveys them. Over time as he hones his talent I have no doubt he can actually produce some top grade stuff if his first work is an unpolished gem like this.

 

[xanon]

I don't know how he can be working in a kitchen since 3rd grade and not have any calluses or scars.

 

[stilgar]

The fact the author said he had no callouses on his hands even though he has been cooking professionally for like 10 years tells me the author has never cooked a day in his life

 

[virx]

They are not in Japan but some of them literally has japanese first name 😂