Yuri no Hajimari wa Dorei Kara - Ch. 1

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Please let me know if you think the translation was lacking in some way. I'm still trying to improve and I would love feedback!

Edit: I've fixed some typos I missed and added background information regarding the Yuki-onna nickname.
Edit 2: Fixed some more typos, editing wording, changed 'homosexual' to 'lesbian'. The word literally translates to homosexual, but lesbian sounds better.
 
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Please let me know if you think the translation was lacking in some way. I'm still trying to improve and I would love feedback!
Will point out page 4 should probably say "I'm not going to make it anyway," but that's all I noticed.

A nice proper single directional love triangle, would be nice if they can figure out that one easy solution to this problem or if its gonna go the normal route and have one person get cut out of the triangle.
 
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1. This was fine until suddenly "you're my slave now". No, bitch. She just wants to help because she felt guilty about the accidental kiss.
2. Why the hell the MC would just get roll over like that?
3. The "disgusting homo" thingy. By the look of those spying on them, it's pretty much meh. They was more interesting in why the bitch was so rigid to everyone.
 

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