Migawari de Totsuida Reikoku Kokuou wa Hatsukoi Aitedeshita - Ch. 3

[MangaDex]

 

[Gudachiz]

BUILD UP FOR THEM FUCKING IN CHAPTER 4 LETS GOO

 

[Kanuan19]

This feels like a slowburn, i dont know if its a real slowburn but i hate komi-san shit type mangas.

 

[Mono_Tone]

LET... THEM... FUUUU-

 

[tbvp]

ty for the chapter

 

[lesseffective]

And... Roll credits!

 

[ENCORAAAAAAAAA]

This feels like a slowburn, i dont know if its a real slowburn but i hate komi-san shit type mangas.

Yeah half of this chapter feels very tropy with the typical cold edgy ml description.

But on the other hand it was kinda cute seeing them catch up and actually start considering each other’s feelings.

Either way though this definitely seems like a situation where the romance will drag…

 

[ScryedParadox]

Y'know. Looking at this story and working backward to the original premise of why she was summoned. The family who summoned her seems like they have a death wish. They summon a stranger of unknown upbringing, they can't guarantee she wouldn't commit any faux pas, they don't train her, they don't teach her, they just send her without a care in the world. If it wasn't a guy who would fall head over heel for her, she would rapidly and easily commit multiple actions that would normally not be considered Quirky and Charming, but rather dishonorable and unbecoming of nobility, uncouth, uneducated and an insult to the royalty.

If it wasn't for the complete ass pull coincidence that the guy who loves her died and reincarnated as king, this substitution would not only put her in dire danger, but also the family that summoned her, which after being insulted by the inability to prepare a bride befitting royalty and the norms of noble etiquette, the plot of substitution would likely eventually come to light when investigating whoever taught her manner to see where the actions of reprimand would need to go, and they would likely be put to death for attempting to shirk their duties as well and the attempt at deception of royalty.

 

[ENCORAAAAAAAAA]

Y'know. Looking at this story and working backward to the original premise of why she was summoned. The family who summoned her seems like they have a death wish. They summon a stranger of unknown upbringing, they can't guarantee she wouldn't commit any faux pas, they don't train her, they don't teach her, they just send her without a care in the world. If it wasn't a guy who would fall head over heel for her, she would rapidly and easily commit multiple actions that would normally not be considered Quirky and Charming, but rather dishonorable and unbecoming of nobility, uncouth, uneducated and an insult to the royalty.

If it wasn't for the complete ass pull coincidence that the guy who loves her died and reincarnated as king, this substitution would not only put her in dire danger, but also the family that summoned her, which after being insulted by the inability to prepare a bride befitting royalty and the norms of noble etiquette, the plot of substitution would likely eventually come to light when investigating whoever taught her manner to see where the actions of reprimand would need to go, and they would likely be put to death for attempting to shirk their duties as well and the attempt at deception of royalty.

Thats a fair point. Nothing to argue here about. It was stupid for them to do so.

However, considering how hard is write these sorts of opening I think it’s fine to suspend a little disbelief

Though Its perfectly fine to not like story because of that aswell.

 

[nomadicengi]

So she chose to stay but I'm pretty sure he will try everything to get her home.

 

[ArcLife]

Hmmmm I got nothing

 

[Velmoria]

wait...

'throw salt'
4th chapter of doom, BEGONE!!!

 

[ScryedParadox]

Thats a fair point. Nothing to argue here about. It was stupid for them to do so.

However, considering how hard is write these sorts of opening I think it’s fine to suspend a little disbelief

Though Its perfectly fine to not like story because of that aswell.

Feel free to skip reading this. It's just me discussing writing in general and not this story specifically. And I am in agreement, enjoy it if that stuff is right in your alley.

I understand the effort it takes to properly do your worldbuilding, ensure your characters are consistent and to properly outline your plot and the end goal you're aiming for. I will say, personally, the most difficult thing to write is dialogue because you need to have it flow naturally, consistently with the personalities of each character involved, not force things unnaturally to get to the result you want, and also not have excessive dialogue that is unnecessary for the story. Characterization and small talk is fine, but it should still ultimately serve to provide additional information in a natural manner that helps to either fuel up the personal dramas, advance relationships, expand worldbuilding, set up future consequences and/or advance the plot.

In general, I have a personal belief that you can utilize some contrivances, some pulled it out of your ass deus ex thing to set something up. But if you're aiming at a well written story, you are also required to heavily limit how often you rely on it.

In the case of Isekai stories. I view it as the premise of an isekai itself being an ass pull. You engaged in something that already sets someone up into a specific circumstance with a specific start for your story that is literally a deus ex machina. You can then work backwards to it, to explain how this happened and make it fit and work within the world building, bring it into relevancy into the main storyline as well. This typically happens because we usually want something close to in media res, where we start off the action with a bang. If we worked forward from the world building to determine how the isekai would function, that would also work but it would be a slow burn right off the bat. It could work very well, but it would require a lot more effort to maintain the attention and investment of the reader.

So generally, that one ass pull of the base premise of Isekai is something I accept and can see being used for both the benefit of the writer and the reader. But beyond that initial ass pull, that the reader has already signed up for due to the Isekai genre. The more ass pulls you take to set up your story by force. The less engaging it becomes. The more it becomes a string of tropes. The less you need to engage intellectually into how you see the story advancing based on the characters, their circumstances and the world they're in.

The lower effort stories are typically what you see collectively refered to as trash. And most people understand that and even enjoy it, ironically or unironically. It is a theme park ride, and maybe we have a few nuggets of gold in there.

 

[onekele]

EYYY, I thought I was going to rant in the comments.

 

[razorshaleh]

Ahh yes, accept marriage proposal let's goo....

thank for translate

 

[IvanDFakkov]

Now. Fuck. 10 battalions.

 

[Stupid_Fish]

The lower effort stories are typically what you see collectively refered to as trash. And most people understand that and even enjoy it, ironically or unironically. It is a theme park ride, and maybe we have a few nuggets of gold in there.

This part really hit the nail on the head for a lot of the crowd typically seen in those power fantasy isekais.

Also a really thoughtful analysis of isekai as used as a plot device, made me think about how I write.

 

[Kllick]

So she'll marry using her fake identity... They should change her identity to something else then marry her with her new identity. Of course they need to scrap the engagement with the original Rita first

 

[beanbeanbean]

and we STILL don't know why she rejected him. come on...

 

[Gudachiz]

You people arguing the lore are all wrong, the only truth is that they're fucking first. You can talk lore after, GIVE US WHAT YOU PROMISED AUTHOR AND ARTIST-KUN, WE ALL KNOW THAT'S WHAT YOU'VE BEEN HINTING