The Human Experience.
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Could you further elaborate, please? What do mean by "too french"?
More of a joke about wierd french art. The kind that you feel like there's something going on, but you will never understand what without an art guide.
That's kinda the problem witht his, tho. I'm not one of them professional critics, but there are some personal outtakes. Narrative and graphical, if I to put it into cathegories. But both are of similar nature and therefore synergize, making it quite hard to comprehend. For example, first chapter made like an introductory chapter, but it also feels like there's one-two chapters missing before it. And graphically it's sometimes very hard/impossible to understand what is happening or who's talking, espechially since we don't know any of the characters presented. Overall, execution is really flawed.
Saying that, I feel like artists has potential. He would definetly benefit from studying conventional comic structure and the likes for the beginning. Dunno how about you, but cover art is what made me click on this to begin with. Again, there is potential, but artist really gotta improve on it.
Hmmm... I understand.
I don't think you need to be a professional to have your own opinion.
Actually, what you say is very true.
Story:
1. Regarding the narrative structure of the story I have to say that your feeling of some episodes missing is true, I did not write a conventional story that goes from point A to Z, but more one that goes from C to E and progressively fill those missing parts (in this case A to B) throughout the chapters.
Nonetheless, I believe that as you read every chapter you begin to understand each time more and more about the situation that the characters are involved in (so the lore, basically). I think it is an interesting approach to have in a story.
(But something important to consider is that this is my first story and that I might have lacked the technique to do what I intended to create, so I guess we'll see.)
2. Chapter 3 is intentionally more chaotic than the other chapters because I wanted to represent the mental chaos of a person that is about to suicide though the composition, but I understand that it might have not been the best way to do it. (Again, I'm a beginner and I'm trying to see what works out and what doesn't, and I thank you for being honest with your critique. It allows me to become better and realize some mistakes that I wouldn't have noticed otherwise
.)Graphics:
3. I hadn't notice it was difficult to identify who's talking. So I'll try to add more chat bubbles when possible.
(And regarding the execution, I guess I'll get better with more practice, thank you very much!)
Thank you, really! 🤍
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