Koujo Tensei: Densetsu no Dai Madoushi (♂), Hime Kishi to Narite Densetsu no Reijou Kishidan o Tsukuri Musou Suru

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Chapter 1 is good so far, but I'm a bit surprised that it isn't an adaptation of a WN or LN.
 
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Hm, pretty good, I rate it 7.5 / 10, rounded up to 8 for now.

The main nerd character got reincarnated as a princess, and with that tip-top body... aspires to become a musclebrain warrior. Yeah, that's fairly novel.

So far, there's no RPG-type status windows. I appreciate that, these manga tend to lean too much on those, and they all look the same. If you can't make it novel, better to just skip it.

To solidify the 8 rating, I'd want more memorable characters. The princess is good, now add more.
Also, there needs to be more than one recurring joke.

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To upgrade it to a nine, I'd want an actual clever plot, good world-building, and also some philosophical ponderings or genuine feels to balance the jokes. Author, show off those brains of yours a bit.

Like, going from a shy nerd to a boisterous girl is a vaguely trans narrative; you could expand on that to reflect on the male/female divide and what gender really means. Is the princess as OP in rulership, and are there as many gender-based barriers in her way there? Does the princess have a sexual preference, and how has that changed since their previous life?

Or you could focus on the actual minutia of being a princess in an empire, like the effects of different tax policies, or how many maids are daughters of nobility, so there's going to be political consequences of two maids becoming friends. What was the actual building of the Empire like, and how does the hero's historical presentation differ from the MC's memories of him?

Or maybe play up the fantasy angle and talk about how threats of dragon attack affects castle architecture, and what proper Dungeon management looks like, ley lines affecting empire politics, the impact on culture from having multiple intelligent species, and so on.
 
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Liking it so far, just the fact that there is not status window and stuff like that is a huge W, now, i feel like this wont be the kind of story where the fact that she was a dude before will play any role outside of the beginning
 
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Hell yeah, musclehead princess who used to be a dude in a previous life but is entirely unbothered to be a lady now, trans-coding ahoy.
Being unbothered kinda sucks for the genderswap genre. The swapped MC may as well be an entirely distinct character, making the swap useless in the first place on a story perspective.
 
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Being unbothered kinda sucks for the genderswap genre. The swapped MC may as well be an entirely distinct character, making the swap useless in the first place on a story perspective.
Not necessarily, there is potential in "you know this is actually fine" to be actually be explored more in-depth, either to explore Gender Stuff, or to indicate a character has a unique perspective where certain things just aren't even on their radar, it can still be wasted potential if it is basically not utilized at all, but a character just kind of rolling with it is not inherently a worse trope than constantly freaking out or doing some narcissism.
 
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Not necessarily, there is potential in "you know this is actually fine" to be actually be explored more in-depth, either to explore Gender Stuff, or to indicate a character has a unique perspective where certain things just aren't even on their radar, it can still be wasted potential if it is basically not utilized at all, but a character just kind of rolling with it is not inherently a worse trope than constantly freaking out or doing some narcissism.
I disagree. Confusion, narcissism, self-introspection... are all key tropes in the genre. If you set up this plot device in a story and end up not using lt, it's a waste of time and may as well be a footnote in a character sheet.
Ayakashi Triangle uses a GB plot device but eventually fails to exploit it: MC turns into a girl but doesn't care. No introspection, nothing that changes personnality-wise... as if it was supposed to be normal. I highly suspect the author wanted the ability to do heavy fan-service, while avoiding the trouble of designing a female MC with the thought pattern and personnality of a true female character. Not sure about the fan-service part, but the second part might apply here.

Where's the drama, where are the moral dilemmas? Where's the classic shower scene, the male-friend-that-turns-romantic-interest? Waiter, my GB slop is dry and tasteless!
 
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I disagree. Confusion, narcissism, self-introspection... are all key tropes in the genre. If you set up this plot device in a story and end up not using lt, it's a waste of time and may as well be a footnote in a character sheet.
Ayakashi Triangle uses a GB plot device but eventually fails to exploit it: MC turns into a girl but doesn't care. No introspection, nothing that changes personnality-wise... as if it was supposed to be normal. I highly suspect the author wanted the ability to do heavy fan-service, while avoiding the trouble of designing a female MC with the thought pattern and personnality of a true female character. Not sure about the fan-service part, but the second part might apply here.

Where's the drama, where are the moral dilemmas? Where's the classic shower scene, the male-friend-that-turns-romantic-interest? Waiter, my GB slop is dry and tasteless!
Tropes are a tool, they don't all have to be used in exactly the same way in every story. Also did you read the same Ayakashi triangle I did??? That story is deeeeply invested in the protag's drama "I should turn back into a guy! Should I?" journey, it just also has shonen action stuff going on too, has plenty of the MC's friend getting flustered around his now female rival, and plenty of bathing nudity both alone and with other characters.

Hell, you've also ignored the sapphic undertones with that story, the "I should become a man partly so we can have a relationship Suzu" "I mean a girl is fine too" "What?" "What?"

I think you just want "dude turns into a girl and gets fucked by his dude friend" stories, and there's pleeeeenty of those, I personally am here for trans-coding, sapphics, and badass warrior women. You see how those are radically different approaches to the genre, both of which are valid in their own right, and don't have to be exactly the same as each other?

Just admit you have a preference for one kind without presenting it as the one objectively correct true version, you'll be happier that way.
 
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Tropes are a tool, they don't all have to be used in exactly the same way in every story. Also did you read the same Ayakashi triangle I did??? That story is deeeeply invested in the protag's drama "I should turn back into a guy! Should I?" journey, it just also has shonen action stuff going on too, has plenty of the MC's friend getting flustered around his now female rival, and plenty of bathing nudity both alone and with other characters.

Hell, you've also ignored the sapphic undertones with that story, the "I should become a man partly so we can have a relationship Suzu" "I mean a girl is fine too" "What?" "What?"

I think you just want "dude turns into a girl and gets fucked by his dude friend" stories, and there's pleeeeenty of those, I personally am here for trans-coding, sapphics, and badass warrior women. You see how those are radically different approaches to the genre, both of which are valid in their own right, and don't have to be exactly the same as each other?

Just admit you have a preference for one kind without presenting it as the one objectively correct true version, you'll be happier that way.
Why do I always find myself arguing with freaks on the internet? Anyways... you're not fine in the head buddy. Bye.
 

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