Hi, tl here.
This chapter looks weird right now since it's the first one I ever did.
I had someone explain typesetting to me and I have practiced a lot with wording stuff better.
I will update it when i have time, but will be focusing on the next chapters first.
Thanks for picking this up.
I did want to make a case for leaving the scene with 3 "Awesome!"s as they were written. It's a relatively common gag, where a character maintains a reaction through a number of scenes. Your edit also conveys how the character is continually excited. But repeating the same word, especially, a simple, highly-charged word like "awesome" (as opposed to a word choice like "neat" or "nice"), characterizes the speaker as someone a bit simple and perhaps childlike, which I feel matches Baroness Valedstorm.