P.04 : "like a person of justice" -> not 100% on what you're going for here, is he implying Kai is a just person or that his own ability to judge is similar to a "person of justice"?
P.05 : "To be honest, I don't even know its name." -> either "[...]
even I don't know its name" or "[...] I don't know its name
either"
P.06 :
- "Why fear of god whose name [...]" -> "Why fear a god whose name [...]"
- "...they oppose [...]" -> "...they opposed"
P.09 : "
Hi lost my temper [...]" -> "
I lost my temper [...]"
P.13 : "
Alright on the winged-folk swing [...]" -> presumably "
A ride on the winged-folk swing [...]"?
P.14 : "[...] to take revenge
of Bie?" -> "[...] to take revenge
on Bie?"
P.17 :
- top left bubble has an unerased character
- "[...] there's a place in the island [...]" -> "[...] there's a place on the island [...]"
P.20 :
- "We're talking about someone who is blessed of Aramira." -> presumably "[...] blessed by Aramira."
- same bubble "A person who is kept secret [...]" -> "A person who was kept secret [...]"