Kon'yaku Haki no Akui wa Shoukan kara Okaeshi Shimasu - Vol. 1 Ch. 2

[MangaDex]

 

[Maverun]

right off the bat huh

 

[Zxzzxz2]

Thanks for the tl

 

[jipowap]

Quality TL

 

[grshen]

Quality TL

Thanks! I received a lot of helpful critiques on discord so hopefully the quality only continues to go up.

 

[Hicleric]

I'd prefer not marking empty boxes with text. It breaks up the flow and just makes the reading feel messy.

Still don't have a good gauge on the MC. Yeah, she seems "nice" since she's helping out the girls apong with the establishment but I don't feel like her actual motives or goals are apparent, or will appear organically.

 

[grshen]

I'd prefer not marking empty boxes with text. It breaks up the flow and just makes the reading feel messy.

Still don't have a good gauge on the MC. Yeah, she seems "nice" since she's helping out the girls apong with the establishment but I don't feel like her actual motives or goals are apparent, or will appear organically.

To me, it seems like her and Travis are going to A) use the brothel to make Santal better than Clinted and B) to put Mirelda in her place. Prince is probably gonna be peeved that she’s doing better in the brothel than in Clinted and is probably gonna try and sabotage them, leading to a confrontation between Travis and Andrew. King is probably gonna side with FMC and Travis and the Clinted guys are probably gonna get deranked or something.

I can’t read Japanese nor have I tried reading any of the raws, so let’s see where this goes.

 

[lenovoaxioo]

I think font not changing size would also make things looks more tidy, might try to choose one size

 

[glimmeringstar13]

Aight, finally I found another mmc who's really sharp and not just "he's really sharp" and don't know a shit. (Sorry, but this type is quite rare ok.)

 

[grshen]

I think font not changing size would also make things looks more tidy, might try to choose one size

Yeah i know, but because of the program i use, i don’t really have the luxury of being able to change the spacing. There are ways around the limitations but for now, its the best solution given the circumstances.

The do plan on eventually exploring new programs but at the moment I will make do with what I am currently experienced with.

I plan to pick up another series after this one, so maybe the latter portions of this series can serve as a test bed for getting accustomed to new software.

 

[Elhao]

Aight, finally I found another mmc who's really sharp and not just "he's really sharp" and don't know a shit. (Sorry, but this type is quite rare ok.)

Indeed. I was already thinking "Okay, how long will they be dragging out the misunderstanding..."
That alone gives me hope for the potential and makes me wonder where the story will go.

 

[lesseffective]

Yeah i know, but because of the program i use, i don’t really have the luxury of being able to change the spacing. There are ways around the limitations but for now, its the best solution given the circumstances.

The do plan on eventually exploring new programs but at the moment I will make do with what I am currently experienced with.

I plan to pick up another series after this one, so maybe the latter portions of this series can serve as a test bed for getting accustomed to new software.

Just wanted to share my own remarks, but preface it also with statement that I don't have familiarity with the software involved with typesetting, so I couldn't say how within the limitations it would be.

One thing I'll always bring up for those that might be willing to listen is for the breakpoints in words, which I'll say in large part are where I would put them, but there were some spots I felt could benefit from being altered.

pg7 - ever-ything -> every-thing
pg 10 - im-portance-- -> importance
pg 11 - re-novation -> renovation
pg 13 - enha-ncing -> enhanc-ing
pg 17 - stren-gths -> ...There really isn't a good way to break it, or make it fit either. I accept it, but it doesn't mean I like it.
pg 20 - be-autiful -> beautiful
pg 22 - single-ha-ndedly -> single-handedly [I can see the space constraints in this box, so perhaps rearranging into "managed by its ma-dam single-handedly," would work]
pg 22 - flou-rishing -> flour-ishing

I don't mean to come off as nit picky, and overall I'm just relieved I don't need to bring up basic grammar as on so many other "first works."

 

[grshen]

Just wanted to share my own remarks, but preface it also with statement that I don't have familiarity with the software involved with typesetting, so I couldn't say how within the limitations it would be.

One thing I'll always bring up for those that might be willing to listen is for the breakpoints in words, which I'll say in large part are where I would put them, but there were some spots I felt could benefit from being altered.

pg7 - ever-ything -> every-thing
pg 10 - im-portance-- -> importance
pg 11 - re-novation -> renovation
pg 13 - enha-ncing -> enhanc-ing
pg 17 - stren-gths -> ...There really isn't a good way to break it, or make it fit either. I accept it, but it doesn't mean I like it.
pg 20 - be-autiful -> beautiful
pg 22 - single-ha-ndedly -> single-handedly [I can see the space constraints in this box, so perhaps rearranging into "managed by its ma-dam single-handedly," would work]
pg 22 - flou-rishing -> flour-ishing

I don't mean to come off as nit picky, and overall I'm just relieved I don't need to bring up basic grammar as on so many other "first works."

Nah, I get you.

I only break the words up the way I do mostly because of space constraints.

I do occasionally change up what the translated sentences are if it’s something that doesn’t really fit properly or is redundant. Same with any non-English idioms.

I did it a lot in the first chapter mostly so my TL’s weren’t one to one with the first upload from 4yrs ago.

I’ll keep it in mind but I normally try to just stick with exactly how it comes to me when translated.

That being said you aren’t the first person to mention it, so it’s definitely something I will consider.

 

[Georgeorat]

Thanks! I received a lot of helpful critiques on discord so hopefully the quality only continues to go up.

You should make a reference document, where you will keep a list of names/family names/names of places/special terms/etc.
Because you already show inconsistency in the family name of our MC, a common problem of MTL. I expect this only to get worse, if you don't start tackling it now.


(Also I think the name in the synopsis on the title page(Fondevale)is better than both options you used so far, but that might just be my preference, so feel free to ignore that)

 

[x_renon_x]

The empty boxes are transition panels, they're meant to be empty and not a dialogue box. Don't put anything in it.

Break up (hypen) the words by syllable. Try using dictionaries for that or use the website https://www.howmanysyllables.com/

 

[grshen]

You should make a reference document, where you will keep a list of names/family names/names of places/special terms/etc.
Because you already show inconsistency in the family name of our MC, a common problem of MTL. I expect this only to get worse, if you don't start tackling it now.


(Also I think the name in the synopsis on the title page(Fondevale)is better than both options you used so far, but that might just be my preference, so feel free to ignore that)

I already have one, i started it when i first started the 2nd ch. thanks for the suggestion though!

 

[grshen]

The empty boxes are transition panels, they're meant to be empty and not a dialogue box. Don't put anything in it.

Break up (hypen) the words by syllable. Try using dictionaries for that or use the website https://www.howmanysyllables.com/

Thanks for the suggestion!

 

[bradboy102]

Thanks for the TL! Did you make it through the Queue yet In Battlefield 6 in order to install the single player campaign? That grinds my gears so badly.

 

[grshen]

Thanks for the TL! Did you make it through the Queue yet In Battlefield 6 in order to install the single player campaign? That grinds my gears so badly.

Haha the campaign had a bug where if you died, it dropped frames all the way down to 30fps, and in order to fix it, you need to back out the main menu.

Since the campaign is a separate app, (like Delta Force and CoD), it immediately put me in a 4500 player queue.