The most difficult page was the third one, I guess...
Damn, all those details. And the text... I wouldn't even know how and where to start and just give up coloring that.
Great work, as expected. Your "I NEED POWER" version got really nice. I would suggest some small corrections to text coloring in a few places, like adjusting the color of one or two colons and such, but I'll leave it at that, it's not important.
But one thing got lost and that's their aura on
this page... see the
original in comparison.
In addition, if you fix that, please also look at page 18, the first text block which reads:
I lost to the former guard students who had turned into [Pervert Female Aura] ...
Now, that sounds pretty weird. I know it's the original TL, but that's gotta be wrong. A person cannot turn into an aura. So this would either mean they turn into someone/something (i.e. "perverted females" or "female perverts") or they would
turn on their perverted aura (like releasing or activating it). Not sure what the original text says, but logically it should be either:
students who had turned into [Female Perverts] ...
or
students who had turned on their [Pervert Female Aura] ...
...or alternatively use something like "released their" aura, which sounds even better. I would suggest to correct that part.
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Rude to reduce Hinata and Kana to Desuwa and Pero Pero though.
I wholeheartly agree. This is inacceptable, inexcusable, intolerable, Indefensible, impermissible, insufferable...
❌💢🚫
Poor Kana...
Hehe, as for the content. Since this is Kaede's dream, we now know how she wants to be hugged. And certainly, snuggling up with her like that should feel nice given how squishy she is.
But no matter how powerful Kaede became. In the end she still lost to Sou's Gae Bolg...