@Tarasios
If you reread your own version, you should notice a fair bit of discrepancies of various degrees between the sentences and what's clearly going on.
Can just focus on the latter half after the meeting ended for your version, "as the princess you should become a gal" is a glaringly obvious one.
(Struggling a bit here with how to describe it, but after the meeting part your version frequently felt lacking in bringing the intent)
Personally didn't mind regular speech from the cat in your version btw, since that's only a matter of flair and not a matter of intent.
Although I'm probably too tired/busy/lazy to reread for the purpose of making a proper list, I'll still wish your endeavors well and a pleasant day!
For those that want to try reading this version and already did read the other,
recommend skipping the meeting part here since it's so horrid it won't really help with understanding the story anyways.