Was reading the chapter just before the cat names were fixed, and I have a few more points to add:
1. Did Chris use the -dono honorific earlier in the chapter? If yes, it needs to be included, since that is a major part of her character as a knight. Also, translating honorifics like you did in this chapter usually doesn't turn out well, especially when titles for nobles and knights are involved.
2. Punctuation. There were quite a few missing commas and apostrophes through-out the chapter, and that can be a bit off-putting.
3. Spelling. Specifically, the two that stood out the most, were "oder" and "involved", which should have been "odor" and "evolved" respectively. Use spell-check just in case.