@dikdim Ah, thank you for pointing out that error in page 4. It somehow went past my radar for an embarrassingly amount of time. I’ll try to fix that, but at the same time it’s 1:22AM where we live so you might need to wait.
For the one in page 2, though I’d argue that “I” and “We” can be used interchangeably in many cases, “I” would certainly fit the context better.
Though, I would say that page 6, another “Everyone” would be redundant, as the subject has been already mentioned in that same sentence. And for the one in page 17, both are similarly correct in my opinion, as they both talks about the characteristic of the bloodline magic, so the change wouldn’t be very necessary, but we’ll still take your suggestions into consideration.
Thank you!