Albus Changes the World - Ch. 1

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He actually says he defeated the Demon King 11 times, not once
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Thanks for the chapter!

Typos & edit suggestions: @MLNY
  • p16 "On god." -> ?_?
  • p20-p22: There are some inconsistencies here: p21 suggests the MC has only beaten the demon king once, but then immediately mentions a speedrun record which implies he's won multiple times; and then p22 mentions it took the MC 5 attempts to defeat the demon king, and 13 years, vs. p20 saying the MC is on his 36th loop.
  • p24 "and the idea of a 'perfect timeline' started to obsess me..." -> "and I became obsessed with the idea of a 'perfect timeline'..."
It seems he didn't see my correction on the last one for whatever reason.
 
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This was really funny to read. I really liked the compliment , your my favorite person,
 

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