Kaiten no Albus - Vol. 2 Ch. 11 - Warrior

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Thanks for the chapter!

Typos & edit suggestions: @Yosu26
  • p1 on the 37th loop -> in the 37th loop
  • p1 Albus already knows the warrior, but this is their first encounter. -> Albus already knows the warrior, but this is their first encounter in this loop.
  • p4 A warrior who charged -> A warrior who charges
  • p4 He was brave -> He's brave
  • p7 saint smile -> saintly smile
  • p11 I need the same blunt sword -> I need the same kind of blunt sword // I need a sword as blunt as yesterday
  • p18 I don't know who you are, I refuse. -> I don't know who you are, but I refuse.
 
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Thanks for the chapter!

Typos & edit suggestions: @Yosu26
  • p1 on the 37th loop -> in the 37th loop
  • p1 Albus already knows the warrior, but this is their first encounter. -> Albus already knows the warrior, but this is their first encounter in this loop.
  • p4 A warrior who charged -> A warrior who charges
  • p4 He was brave -> He's brave
  • p7 saint smile -> saintly smile
  • p11 I need the same blunt sword -> I need the same kind of blunt sword // I need a sword as blunt as yesterday
  • p18 I don't know who you are, I refuse. -> I don't know who you are, but I refuse.
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