it's alright so far, but could have been far better with more exposition imo. especially for such an esoteric person and plot, the story just feels a bit clinical as of now. this person does this, for this reason, add some philosophical ramblings on how this connects to a feeling of disconnect to reality or contributes to the flawed noosphere etc., next plot point. these are the basics of writing, i get that, but the vibes are just off on this one
