Final thoughts: axe and pacing management clearly hurt a lot the story (some of the early chapters could have been skipped, especially the third) and the rush started to be felt after chapter 12, where it was reduced to 22 pages per chapter), but authors did the best they could with such a constraint. It was obvious they had more ideas in mind. I think authors had planned this manga for a 30 chapters' series.
A good thing: they're staying in the magazine and will announce her next work soon. That means editorial liked their style and passed the first trial for any rookie mangaka.
Keep in mind two important things: the magazine By Spring was published into, the Big Comic Superior, is the Shogakukan equivalent to Shueisha' s Jump Giga or the deceased Akamaru Jump. It's mostly an entry level magazine for novel authors with one or three series from veteran authors (ie: Hiroya Oku, Shuzo Oshimi) or known franchises (ie: Gundam Thunderbolt) that carry the magazine. I've watched other manga from there that had worse fates than this one, didn't manage to last a full year and had their authors fired (What hapoened to BABEL was unforgivable: it tanked hard to the point it was demoted to the digital edition) . And doing backtrack record, the authors entered to the magazine via the Superior Darupana program (an entry application for rookie authors who want to publish their first manga as professionals). So, it was actually meant to be a shortlived manga from the scratch, and the measure to do a critic or a review can't be the same. So, i think in the end, they did a pretty good job for their first seinen manga, despite of the irregular pacing and panel management, the 5 hiatuses the authors took and the rush in the end and are staying there.
It could have been better? Yeah, a whole fucking lot. But i won't measure a rookie manga with the same measurement a manga from more experienced authors
ahem: Sasuga :ahem: Seo) is measured. Authors who start from scratch like BS's duo without ever being assistants from a popular mangaka never had their first manga being groundbreaking hits. Even Akira Toriyama, Masami Kurumada, Masashi Kishimoto (to mention some mangaka that started without being assistants before and applied via contests or first comic applications for rookie mangaka) had like two failures before hitting the jackpot.
Btw, i won't count PapaGay as their 1st pro manga. It was published in Pixiv and then replicated by a BL magazine from Ichijinsha.