Cupid no Hatsukoi - Oneshot

[TheOneEyedUnicorn]

A self-insert story for twerps.

well..

 

[Omled]

Hopefully it gets serialized and there're no love rival bullshit whatsoever.

 

[IronSagitario]

hoping it gets serialized (idk how much time for that if it ever happens)

 

[subwayanyway]

I'd read this a little further.

 

[TheChiporpoise]

Good story, but goddamn the art irritated the hell out of me. Generally well done and composed but the author's insistence on giant boobs at every angle and opportunity really depreciates the character design. Give empty space a chance to breathe, ya know?

Wing design is absolutely top notch though

Yeah, several times her boobs were emphasized so much it made the rest of her proportions look whack, like on page 12, her neck should not be that far back lmao
Otherwise the art looks great

 

[NoSkillGamer]

My day just gets better and better

 

[Sakuyadorf]

I would like a chapter 2 Yes

 

[KanzakiYuu]

I'm sorry this is the most annoying, unlikeable protagonist type ever. He screams all the time and has like zero reason. He's like Bakugo and going to be unbearable should this get serialized.

Art is amazing, but I'm not a fan of huge women in general.

 

[Lewd_Beast]

This is full of a personal pet peeve. I really dislike overblown unsubtle facial expressions. Drawn with the belief that the readers will not be able to grasp the intended emotion unless they are smashed over the head with a bat. In virtually every frame here, the MC has some overblown aggressive face. I also hate sawtooth teeth and huge sweat drops. They are all cheap and lazy clichés that tell me the artist is treating me like an idiot.

 

[RandomUser96]

I hope it gets serialized just so the creator can get some money, but I don't want it to be more than a one shot.

It's great as a one-shot, but neither character seems all that likeable. The only ideas I have for an expansion involve changing the character and at that point why even serialize it.

 

[wai_ma1]

Not a big fan of the beginning wish fulfillment where that cutie is forced into dating some disgusting piggish low-quality sub-3 male but I did enjoy the art style, rest of the story, and and general writing of how the "cupid works". The twist was rather funny too but is questionable on how much you could continue. You can only drag on the "ooh she's in love with him because of x" for so long. This feels like a lesser, more rom-com focused, seinen/shounen version of Love Bullet. I pleasantly enjoyed it.

 

[misopogon]

The concept is fun, the art style I'm not so sure about. I'll say this though; isn't it a bit of a mess, that she falls for him due to the cupid's arrow, instead of organically? I assume that'd be explored in the story.

 

[weshwg]

Looks good, only issue with me is a romance story centered around the fml getting hit with a love arrow in order to love the mc feels very fake. Just a me thing tho, it looks like a fun read otherwise.

 

[jagfanbb]

Ah dude this better get serialized

 

[Zensud]

SERIALIZATION IS THE ONLY WAY!

 

[weleasewodger]

Moar

MOAR

MOAR!!!

 

[sleezy3x]

i hope this gets serialized soon

 

[Azaleal]

the equivalent of a "1,000yo loli" for "mind control"..

 

[Kitsune_115]

Ok so it is a good one-shot but what else would it have to offer if it gets serialized?

 

[TimeJoker]

MFW I don't have a big titty winged cupid wife. Why even live?