Cupid no Hatsukoi - Oneshot

[PureDisgust]

Not really a fan of the lack of agency portrayed in this story. We have free will for a reason.

 

[TwisterJR]

It was short and funny, the art is good too. Hope it does gets serialized

 

[Dvalkerz]

I dare you to continue this without any harem tag.

 

[MiguelH224]

So.....this kid sees someone on top of a building and he automatically assumes they're gonna jump off......bud you were the one that forced her to reveal those wings, if your dumbass didn't surprise her like that she wouldn't have fallen off


I'm willing to check this manga out when it get serialized...but I already know this dude is gonna be a major dumbass smh

 

[sanctuary]

It's cool but a serialization? meh

 

[Juggernautbob]

Good story, but goddamn the art irritated the hell out of me. Generally well done and composed but the author's insistence on giant boobs at every angle and opportunity really depreciates the character design. Give empty space a chance to breathe, ya know?

Wing design is absolutely top notch though

No, I must cram giant badonkers into every last panel!!! -the mangaka, probably.

 

[luk91]

gave it a like in the source, hope it continues!

 

[DaDingo]

I wonder that when they Serialized this if they would dive deeper into the concept of forced love or not.

like a thing they could really do is if the arrows she shoots make up feelings or just amplifies what's already there?

this could be a neat thing to talk about especially if she is just been making people fall in love just to make a quota and not what's best for them.

there could also be a question of if she actually had feelings for Mc or if it was just the arrow at work.

anyway i liked it hope it gets serialized

 

[aZeke]

cupid yandere arc begins

 

[KaiserFrazer67]

Not my cuppa. Pass.

 

[Wizardrone]

How nice!

 

[darkesword]

Rob Liefeld-ass chest proportions.

 

[Rioksek]

I hope a cupid flys by and shoots an arrow at me and shoots me again. I wanna like myself before I like someone else T_T

 

[fatkidfallsdown]

Sooo good! I need it serialized

 

[a_singular_strike]

Not bad, but not really good for me either.
First up, I dislike the reason for "falling in love". It's not a case where they actually liked the person and just suppressed their emotions because of societal expectations, lack of time, monetary issues, etc. No, those arrows simply cause the person to fall in love with someone they see. If the story would perhaps delve into the negative aspects of this forced romance and how it ends up, then it would be a lot more interesting and give it more nuance. Though I doubt it will happen as the manga portrays it rather positively.

Secondly, as other have said it before me, the protagonist is annoying with his over-the-top attitude, can't really say more to this, as I just don't like it.

And at last the artstyle. While good, I found it sometimes jarring (and not in a good way). Looking closer, it is the most prominent in Yako (the female lead). While she is a lot bigger than the MC, her head seems roughly the same size (while her neck is thinner). Add to that, that the placement of her head is to far back and it makes the rest of the body look unbalanced (perhaps to make her breasts even bigger). Funny enough, all the other characters don't share this weird anatomy, which makes this even sadder.

I guess this just isn't my cup of tea.

 

[BatCrow]

huh...

it's cute alright
but... serialization...?

I mean... where to go after that?

I'm afraid dragging the romance after that end scene, or adding more details in between for serialization might just decrease the charm.
Converting it to Shonen? with the boy as some kind cupid's assistant ?

A short little arc of less than 20 chapters could definitely be cute, kinda on the same page as you for long term though.

 

[Hard_jo]

Tall women

 

[Sunspawn]

i like the premise but mc looks like a fucking gremlin lmao you gotta swap his looks lmao

You gotta swap your looks bro. The art style is ugly af, why not look like the rest of the world?

 

[wallsg]

Wait so she accidentally stabbed herself with the arrow while they were looking at each other? doesn't that mean that her newfound feelings for him are sort of brainwashed and not genuinely what she wants?

Since we know that you don't have to be shot with the arrow and all that is required is penetration, she should have plenty of times in the future to manifest an arrow and just stab him with it. We've already seen her instantly close a 50 or 100 yard distance and grab him so she could just do it again but stab him. If she is truly brainwashed into adoring him then the only way to make the story not go that way is to either make her want him to genuinely fall for her or to limit her power so that she can't use in on someone that she loves. The former doesn't seem likely since she thinks taking away free will with her power is a good thing.

 

[Kurovah]

That's a big oopsie