FINAL CATALYST

[MangaDex]

 

[GONTE]

THANK YOU FOR READING THE ONESHOT!
► Novel Website: https://www.new-generations.com/
► Discord: https://discord.gg/x2bTAR8XX
► KO-FI: https://ko-fi.com/gonte

This is a standalone one-shot, but I’m considering expanding it into a full serialization.

 

[joeygold]

THANK YOU FOR READING THE ONESHOT!
► Novel Website: https://www.new-generations.com/
► Discord: https://discord.gg/x2bTAR8XX
► KO-FI: https://ko-fi.com/gonte

This is a standalone one-shot, but I’m considering expanding it into a full serialization.

Great work, i can feel the effort that went into each panel in both art and story wise, Here is my opinion on it as just someone that read few thousands of different manga, manhwa and manhua.
Character designs of siblings are very cool and inclusion of gun-fu is a cool thing sorely lacking in eastern graphic novel market.
Art style also reminds me of Darker Than Black which is also very cool.
Fight choregraphy is also very good at conveying actions clearly.

But small sized paneling of prolonged fights makes combat seem too fast paced to convey the gravity of hits and damage taken by both sides.
For example during the cableskull fight most of the panels are too small and attacks and actions appear too unimportant as a result, which is honestly a disservice to the effort that went into choregraphy and art. Most modern shounen hits like "Regressed Mercenary's Machinations", "Firepunch", "JJK", and "Chainsawman" Part 1 and Early Part 2 are good examples at conveying weight in combat, which makes their fight scenes very popular, looking at how they convey fights and action scenes would be nice for your future work, but maybe thats just my eastern bias talking and im missing some western comic book paneling culture here.
Also square sound effect boxes are too western comic book style, while art style is 2000s manga. This makes sound effect boxes clash with scene they are in, especially due to art style having good amount of black and vfx boxes being white background.

Also art style and story is prime burnout material for both the author and the artist, so take care on that aswell and don't end up like chainsawman part 2, berserk and other stuff with expressive and detailed art.