Gachi Koi Maou-sama - Vol. 1 Ch. 4

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We just gonna ignore the fact that he was going to murder her because he was infuriated
Look, he's got just this one thing going for him, man.
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@meowbe At page 9, there are two errors I can spot: "Where were", which should be "which were", and "an unique", which should "a unique". Because unique has the y sound, and not the u sound, it follows the grammar of consonants, not vowels.
Other than that, I don't find much issues with your sentences! But maybe use grammarly to find issues like the one I put above, since it is a bit hard to spot.

It seems Maou-sama really thirsts for Yuu so much. I never expected her to become depressed without his presence. She even has all sorts of merch based on him now! I mean, Bromides? Her servants are really going the extra mile to help her with Yuu's absence. Yuu, you'd better take responsibility now, or she'll fall into deeper degeneracy pretty soon! Just be there for her!
 
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@meowbe At page 9, there are two errors I can spot: "Where were", which should be "which were", and "an unique", which should "a unique". Because unique has the y sound, and not the u sound, it follows the grammar of consonants, not vowels.
Other than that, I don't find much issues with your sentences! But maybe use grammarly to find issues like the one I put above, since it is a bit hard to spot.

It seems Maou-sama really thirsts for Yuu so much. I never expected her to become depressed without his presence. She even has all sorts of merch based on him now! I mean, Bromides? Her servants are really going the extra mile to help her with Yuu's absence. Yuu, you'd better take responsibility now, or she'll fall into deeper degeneracy pretty soon! Just be there for her!
Thanks for catching those issues!
 
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Are these guys really such a threat that the hero is always so gung ho to beat their leader lol
I mean the hero clearly can’t beat her as shown in the first chapter and she also stated that she could and would kill everyone so there are only 2 of them left lol.
 

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