Heimin no Watashi desu ga Koushaku Reijou-sama o Taburakashite Ikiteimasu - Vol. 1 Ch. 2

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The big problem here is that this work is baldy written, not that it is "standart OP harem yuri". Both narrative and presentation of themes are just dumped on you without any proper setup (which even your average OP harem manga is at least able to do). That was basically chapter one.

Chapter two suddenly establishing MC having superpowers seemingly like no other out of nowhere without any kind of proper setup was just symbolic for how amateurish this whole work is in the first place, as seen in the first chapter. You don't have to be a genius to know that this will neither have a good story or good yuri.
not really?

she specified in CH 1 she can perfectly imitate anything she sees, and it's why she was "the star pupil" from her teacher in terms of getting etiquette, and we already established she is a cut above...everyone, with martial prowess despite having very little time to do so

as a result we have already seen her BS in the physical and social realm, now it's just showing to be the third facet of these works, but it's speedrunning to get the harem I guess, probably due to a short production cycle/series size
 
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not really?

she specified in CH 1 she can perfectly imitate anything she sees, and it's why she was "the star pupil" from her teacher in terms of getting etiquette, and we already established she is a cut above...everyone, with martial prowess despite having very little time to do so

as a result we have already seen her BS in the physical and social realm, now it's just showing to be the third facet of these works, but it's speedrunning to get the harem I guess, probably due to a short production cycle/series size
I am really sorry, i can't take you seriously if that is what you think a "setup" is. Enjoy the manga, your standards are low enough for it.
 
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ironic coming from someone with your reading history :kek:
Like what? Tower Dungeon from Nihei? Or bunch of yuri works? Do you even know what i've read over all my life? Quite a shallow statement. Not that i expected anything less if we go by what nonsense you spouted just in this short exchange.
 
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Like what? Tower Dungeon from Nihei? Or bunch of yuri works? Do you even know what i've read over all my life? Quite a shallow statement. Not that i expected anything less if we go by what nonsense you spouted just in this short exchange.
yes yes mr "it aint my gruel so it's shit"

it's all gruel and gruel is shit, get over yourself... I feel second hand embarrassment for you :huh:
 
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yes yes mr "it aint my gruel so it's shit"

it's all gruel and gruel is shit, get over yourself... I feel second hand embarrassment for you :huh:
What are you even talking about

Edit: Oh, i see now. You think my criticism was subjective? Do you even understand what makes something objectively badly written?
 
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What are you even talking about

Edit: Oh, i see now. You think my criticism was subjective? Do you even understand what makes something objectively badly written?
no, going the route of "you counterpointed me with an objective point? means you are stupid and I will now use nothing but insults" made me chuckle at your lack of ability to take alternate or missed facts and I've merely met you in kind...but I don't live in a glass house when I throw stones :smugchisato:
 
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no, going the route of "you counterpointed me with an objective point? means you are stupid and I will now use nothing but insults" made me chuckle at your lack of ability to take alternate or missed facts and I've merely met you in kind...but I don't live in a glass house when I throw stones :smugchisato:
Do you even understand what makes something objectively badly written?
Please don't deflect with nonsense yet again and try to answer this simple question.
 
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Please don't deflect with nonsense yet again and try to answer this simple question.
yeah, your arguments are objectively articulated badly and come from a subjective demand for a narrative structure wholly unused in this medium, and your read history (before you locked everyone out of your account) shows that you have read similar stuff that had equally junky narrative structures as this, you are just salty because "muh pace" and I responded with it probably just being a short series or quick release and you reacted with insults and stated that no smart person can even justify the narrative structure this is going with...

which is funny to laugh at
 
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yeah, your arguments are objectively articulated badly and come from a subjective demand for a narrative structure wholly unused in this medium, and your read history (before you locked everyone out of your account) shows that you have read similar stuff that had equally junky narrative structures as this, you are just salty because "muh pace" and I responded with it probably just being a short series or quick release and you reacted with insults and stated that no smart person can even justify the narrative structure this is going with...

which is funny to laugh at
Your strange rambling aside, can you properly answer this question or not? Let's try it again, we will get you there:
Do you even understand what makes something objectively badly written?
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Your strange rambling aside, can you properly answer this question or not? Let's try it again, we will get you there:

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that....that was the answer, I know what is objectively badly written, an example being your entire arguments and structure... you seem to not get it
 
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that....that was the answer, I know what is objectively badly written, an example being your entire arguments and structure... you seem to not get it
Let's try it this way: Do you understand what makes something badly written, and if yes, can you explain what the usual pitfalls might be in storytelling? I know this is starting to get difficult and your concentration is fading, but you have to bear with us here. It's for your own good. Maybe you will learn from it even.
 
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The big problem here is that this work is baldy written, not that it is "standart OP harem yuri". Both narrative and presentation of themes are just dumped on you without any proper setup (which even your average OP harem manga is at least able to do). That was basically chapter one.
While I'm enjoying the reading I do fully agree with you. There is no setup (or the little setup there is, is so fragmented that it's basically void), and at the same time there is very little follow up. For example they did all the talk about element affinity and these being analyzed by the church. I would expect, if the author want to keep the idea of "copyin-simulating" skills, that after such display of magic they would have bringed her to a goddammit church to analyze fully her affinities (if there is the possibility of having more then one, that it's not something it's ever explicited in these chapters). Instead all seems forgotten, scenario move to the accademy and in the next few chapters no Lilah doing magic is found (I don't know if it's at least mentioned, they were the chinese raws) instead focusing
on a swordmanship duel that she loose, apparently invalidating they idea that she is OP, at least for now
Wethever the magic is bought back later, I don't know, but is still done quite badly.
At least, it seems to me, by not being able to read chinese at all and the Contrans userscript I'm using doesn't work outside twitter and pixiv, that after chapter 3 we may have a beginning of a sort of character transformation arc
 
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Let's try it this way: Do you understand what makes something badly written, and if yes, can you explain what the usual pitfalls might be in storytelling? I know this is starting to get difficult and your concentration is fading, but you have to bear with us here. It's for your own good. Maybe you will learn from it even.
I don't need to learn anything from you, you are just a lol cow fit to be farmed, best thing I can do is learn how not to be like you... and I did that a long time ago
 
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I don't need to learn anything from you, you are just a lol cow fit to be farmed, best thing I can do is learn how not to be like you... and I did that a long time ago
Let's try it this way: Do you understand what makes something badly written, and if yes, can you explain what the usual pitfalls might be in storytelling?
Why don't you try to be less mad and answer this question?
 
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Why don't you try to be less mad and answer this question?
me dealing with you RN:
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get off the internet kid, there are pedophiles, porn, murder, child soldier recruiters and many worse things on here... going "I don't like your answer so say it again" until someone stops caring enough to respond then thinking you win is exactly how a child operates, and you operate on such a basis
 
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get off the internet kid, there are pedophiles, porn, murder, child soldier recruiters and many worse things on here... going "I don't like your answer so say it again" until someone stops caring enough to respond then thinking you win is exactly how a child operates, and you operate on such a basis
Why is it so hard for you to answer simple questions? Let's try it one more time:
Do you understand what makes something badly written, and if yes, can you explain what the usual pitfalls might be in storytelling?
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your life is objectively badly written, I suggest your author scrap it and start a new one
One more time, simple question, very basic stuff.
Do you understand what makes something badly written, and if yes, can you explain what the usual pitfalls might be in storytelling?
And by the way, i know why you don't answer this question. You simply can't. But don't go around and act as if you understand what you are talking about. The moment you meet someone that just doesn't talk big but knows even somewhat his stuff, you will look like a fool. Like you are doing now. At this point i'm just entertained by how mad you are.
 

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