I Don't Love You Anymore - Vol. 1 Ch. 13

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Lol i'm not even angry at Valer it's just too funny. Also I feel like they could've developed his character more to make chapter 13 extra angsty. I find that him suddenly realizing that he fucked up (and that he ~probably~ loved the FL) doesn't hit as hard. I feel like having tiny little hints that he somehow cared for the FL more than he let on would've made the angst much more impactful. I mean, we got to have the flashback curtain scene but that's it. I don't hate him. Don't like him either. Guy got what he deserved. I just think it needed a little more for me to be emotionally invested on the break-up-but-not-really-a-break-up scene. Just my two cents.
 
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Also dragging out the angst a bit more could've made the whole situation less cliche. I mean, the premise is already a total cliche but it could've been handled more delicately so as to avoid being soap-operatic (as @Pokari mentioned). This story heavily relies on already established tropes, and i'm a sucker for brilliantly executed tropes but this isn't panning out as well as I hoped. But since we're still in the early chapters, I'm sure it'll get better! 💕
 
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I lovveeee this chapter, it felt to fucking good to see Valer cry 😌😌 but like... idk y I lowkey like him😭😭
 
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I feel like we won’t be seeing wistash anymore, but he’s the main reason for the story’s title. Oh well, good riddance boy!
 
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home girl would’ve given him world bro. he’s literally such a piece of trash. trash that can’t even be recycled. piece of absolute horsecrap.
 
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damn fuck i’m not crying for this bitchass i’m crying for the fl & all her struggles. you did u best😭😭 better times are coming
 
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wait! scam retirement staffer! think it through don't cry with wistrash! no matter how good-looking he is, just give him a bald head then think again, don't be rash cuz he is trash. 😡 just look he even made our girl cry! 🌋
 
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why must the author play me like this?? one second I hate him then this???
 

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