Kei to Ayakashi - Ch. 1 - Father and Daughter

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The ayakishi has all the traits of a yuki onna but that looks a lot like a dude so I doubt it
 
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hope there will be not a random boy shows up and mess up the story later for romance
That shouldn't be much of a problem unless they go full Sailor moon and she becomes crippled if the love interest isn't around... I remember thinking like that with Frieren, I wanted adventure!! so when Stark showed up I thought he would make things awkward but not at all, even with the hints of romance, the story and adventure is progressing nicely... But well, that depends on each author.
 
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>retarded boomer dad imposes his selfish desires on her daughter

>daughter still want to inherit her righful legacy and embraces it​

That's it.
That's the shonen stuff I wanted so much to read.
Shonenbros we are so back.
 
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Nice pilot. Let's how well the author and the editor handles it from here on
 
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Thanks for the chapter!

Typos & edit suggestions: @NotsoFps
  • p5 a ayakashi -> an ayakashi
  • p7 Mom the last person she... called out for was you. -> Mom, the last person she... called out for was you. // The last person Mom called out for... was you.
  • p12 Right, my future -> Right, my future. // Right, my future...
  • p32 So I gave it to her, saying it was only natural she could draw a sword that couldn't be drawn. -> [From context, maybe this was meant to read "So I gave it to her, saying then it would only be natural for her to be able to draw a sword that couldn't be drawn." or similar.]
  • p38 It was your fate to inherit the Shiranui family. -> It was your fate to succeed the Shiranui family. // It was your fate to inherit the Shiranui family's power. [or family's bloodline / will / mission, or something]
  • p49 For someone inexperienced with such power you -> For someone inexperienced with such power, you
 

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