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Sometimes not having a consequence is a consequence of its own. Plus we don't really need that here. This isn't a revenge story. This is a wholesome healing story.
Kiraware Majo to Karada ga Irekawatta Keredo, Watashi wa Kyou mo Genki ni Kurashiteimasu!
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Reading page 1 spoilers -- I can't say I care much for it. However the story may proceed, the story is currently centered on good vibes and cutesy characters, that's pretty much the selling point of the story -- A Bubbles-level of positivity from the MC, and the characters around her get swept up by it. Good shit.
That being said, the story has obvious glaring faults....The low hanging fruit being, the MC took over the role of "the evil witch", that destroyed the forest, and is responsible for the deaths of many people and magical-critters -- but the forest dwellers don't harbor any resentment towards her, even though the squirrels clearly stated: "This place became a swamp, after many of our folks drowned and decomposed in there".
That's some cruel arse shit, and yet the forest-dwellers just immediately go: "Yay! Good witch! Here are some gifts! Thank you so much!!" -- while zeroing-out on what she did to them? The humans make much more sense, in harboring resentment and suspicion.
And apropos the animals -- I personally find it in very bad taste, to have the characters eat meat-products, while also having animal-friends that can speak -- without clearly, and definitively, making the distinction between "cattle that is fine to eat", and "magical animals that can speak and think'. Otherwise, it just gives off the vibes that: "Yeah, we eat our friends, so what?
" (The existence of the Bear in the panels is also suspect).
Also, the knight puts his trust in the witch way too quickly, and conveniently. It turned into a shoujo-manga almost instantly the moment he entered the scene. It's just badly written.
The magic system is also incredibly weak, but at least that's easy to ignore.
(At one chapter the MC literally goes: "chant chant chant, <create-makeup>" after she gathers the materials. That's weak sauce, should've shown she studied so much, she can magically combine ingredients together with various tools, to scientifically-esque create her things, rather than go: "Bibadip-boo, combine random shit to make me some lip-gloss boo".)
Overall, this is as far away as it can get from being a perfect, or a really good story -- but it just shows that you only need to have very key-elements honed in, and it will succeed (at least in my eyes lol).
But the moment it will start to gravitate away from: "MC is really positive and charismatic, and does fun things" -- to either shoujo shit or revenge-shit, I'm out.
That being said, the story has obvious glaring faults....The low hanging fruit being, the MC took over the role of "the evil witch", that destroyed the forest, and is responsible for the deaths of many people and magical-critters -- but the forest dwellers don't harbor any resentment towards her, even though the squirrels clearly stated: "This place became a swamp, after many of our folks drowned and decomposed in there".
That's some cruel arse shit, and yet the forest-dwellers just immediately go: "Yay! Good witch! Here are some gifts! Thank you so much!!" -- while zeroing-out on what she did to them? The humans make much more sense, in harboring resentment and suspicion.
And apropos the animals -- I personally find it in very bad taste, to have the characters eat meat-products, while also having animal-friends that can speak -- without clearly, and definitively, making the distinction between "cattle that is fine to eat", and "magical animals that can speak and think'. Otherwise, it just gives off the vibes that: "Yeah, we eat our friends, so what?
" (The existence of the Bear in the panels is also suspect).Also, the knight puts his trust in the witch way too quickly, and conveniently. It turned into a shoujo-manga almost instantly the moment he entered the scene. It's just badly written.
The magic system is also incredibly weak, but at least that's easy to ignore.
(At one chapter the MC literally goes: "chant chant chant, <create-makeup>" after she gathers the materials. That's weak sauce, should've shown she studied so much, she can magically combine ingredients together with various tools, to scientifically-esque create her things, rather than go: "Bibadip-boo, combine random shit to make me some lip-gloss boo".)
Overall, this is as far away as it can get from being a perfect, or a really good story -- but it just shows that you only need to have very key-elements honed in, and it will succeed (at least in my eyes lol).
But the moment it will start to gravitate away from: "MC is really positive and charismatic, and does fun things" -- to either shoujo shit or revenge-shit, I'm out.
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