Love Story Show - Oneshot

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Good thing I quickly scrolled to the end to see how it turns out since I had bad feelings from the first few pages.
 
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And the cycle continues!

If only love stories really were like this man. You know, where people try and appeal to and understand one another, instead of having constant misunderstandings and shenanigans.

I think Furakawa only did this kind of stuff because she wanted her boyfriend to notice her. But no matter what she did, he never really cared, it seems. He was even cheating on her before she even did this. I don't know if it was good that this was what she she chose to get his attention, but it looked like it failed. But it seems that Yuki appreciated her charms, so he fell in love with her and successfully confessed.
 
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I came for sugar, got sugar, and am leaving with a smile.
 
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hmm... interesting... i got so much conflicting thoughts on this one...
 
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I liked it. Fairly original concept. This is me thinking that her boyfriend had been mistreating her and cheating on her from the very beginning. The flashing was a bit too much and should be removed since it sours what's potentially a wholesome story. The beginning part where she chooses the MC she wants to partner with should be partly justified. Please no trope where they already met during their childhood days and the MC forgot but the FL didn't. A bunch of slice of life here and there. Maybe develop two additional characters for both leads to bounce their thoughts off.

Maybe the FL intended to just tease him at first regarding the video idea, but all of a sudden, the MC accepts without hesitation and traps her. MC had this confidence burst because maybe he saw her crying and overheard about her boyfriend a few days ago, which is only revealed towards the end.

Very easy to insert ideas into the framework of this oneshot.
 
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I admit I was uncomfortable with how she nonchalantly said she had a boyfriend and that fact got swept under the rug, with the protagonist not even mentioning it until page 20. She flirts with him every day despite that fact, taking advantage of his inability to set any boundaries.

"Of course not, I wouldn't do such a thing"
He wasn't wrong though, at that point as far as he knew she had a boyfriend. Holding back on her was the right thing to do.

Her trying to get back at her cheating boyfriend by flirting with another guy is just using a wrong to fight another wrong, and that rubs me the wrong way. Just dump his ass, attempting to cheat on a cheater isn't always going to work. And it didn't work in this case, she ended up breaking up with her cheater boyfriend anyway.

While it's good she found a new love right away, I honestly wished she was just lying about having a boyfriend, so this left a bad taste in my mouth. Sorry, I don't want to experience a romance like that. Based on the last page, maybe I'll just pretend the entire thing was staged.
 

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