Mr. Clice - Vol. 4 Ch. 16 - Showdown in Beijing; The Sleepless Ancient Capital

[MangaDex]

 

[1234muse]

Fun and strange as always, thanks for the translation

 

[renseiryuu]

Fun and strange as always, thanks for the translation

Hi, fast as always XD. Enjoy the chapter as I work on the next one.

 

[Benjansss]

Thanks again, there’s definitely less mistakes this time

pg 2, “through city hall“ would imply the president is moving in the building, as he’s in a car “past city hall“ as in driving past, makes more sense.

pg 6, “safe travels” is generally what’s said instead of “safe travel”

pg 8, “better to be safe” instead of “better be safe”

pg, 9 “do you have a fever” instead of “did you have a fever” present vs. past tense. Also “did something happen“ instead of “did something happened“ again present vs past tense.

pg 14, “ it can’t be helped” instead of “can’t be helped”

pg 16, “castle of a home” implies that his home is like a castle eg large, luxurious etc (a simile), however since his home is a literal castle just ”in his castle home” makes more sense. Also instead of ”them alot to u.s.” ”them a lot to the u.s.”

ph 17, “we were honestly“ instead of “we’re honestly“ past vs present tense. Also instead of “calling me” “called me” again past vs present tense

pg 18, “not more tranquillisers” instead of “not another tranquillosers“ as its plural not singular. Also “trains in china” instead of “train in china” so it’s plural. And “I was suprised“ instead of “I’m surprised“ past vs present tense.

pg 19, “the memory“ instead of “a memory” “a memory“ would suggest she literally has a past memory involving a goldfish

pg 21, “does have alot“ instead of “did have a lot” past vs present tense

pg 24, “how was it” instead of “how’s it” present vs past tense

pg 25, “the story was” instead of “the story is” past vs present tense. Also “remember the part” instead of “remembered the part“ past vs present tense

pg, 28, “you once had” instead of “you once have” present vs past tense. Also “with a radio” instead of “with radio“

pg, 31, “through body armour“ instead of “through a body armour“. this is because armour is made up of multiple pieces and “a” suggests a single thing.
Also stash is a singular not plural word so something like “that’s a huge stash” would make more sense

pg 32, “by the minute“ instead of ”by the minutes“, as she’s referring to each individual minute that passes. Also “she does love” instead of “she did love” past vs present tense

pg 36, “perfume she uses” instead of “perfume she use”. Also “why does that pigeon” instead of “why is that pigeon“

pg 37, “it’s solid evidence“ instead of “it’s a solid evidence”

pg, 45 I’m not sure exactly what’s being said here, “you doubted yourself and unable to pull the trigger in the end”. If it said “you doubted yourself and WERE unable to pull the trigger”. It would mean they’re strictly talking about the past. If it said “you doubt yourself and ARE unable to pull the trigger“ that would mean their talking about the present

pg 46 “smoke and shadow are” instead of “smoke and shadow is”. As they are two things. Also ”if you can’t” instead of “if you couldn’t” past vs present tense. And “he still had” instead of “he still got” as the helicopter is no longer hidden.

pg 47, “don’t think you can” instead of “don’t think you could” as it’s present tense

pg 51, ”wearing body armour” instead of “wearing a body armour“

pg 54, ”comes back instead of “come back”

keep up the great work! It’s really appreciated. Easily 80% or more of the mistakes are past vs present tense or plural vs singular. These are some of the easiest mistakes to make in english. please keep at it. Thanks

 

[renseiryuu]

Thanks again, there’s definitely less mistakes this time

pg 14, “ it can’t be helped” instead of “can’t be helped”

pg 16, “castle of a home” implies that his home is like a castle eg large, luxurious etc (a simile), however since his home is a literal castle just ”in his castle home” makes more sense. Also instead of ”them alot to u.s.” ”them a lot to the u.s.”

ph 17, “we were honestly“ instead of “we’re honestly“ past vs present tense. Also instead of “calling me” “called me” again past vs present tense

pg 18, “not more tranquillisers” instead of “not another tranquillosers“ as its plural not singular. Also “trains in china” instead of “train in china” so it’s plural. And “I was suprised“ instead of “I’m surprised“ past vs present tense.

pg 19, “the memory“ instead of “a memory” “a memory“ would suggest she literally has a past memory involving a goldfish

pg 21, “does have alot“ instead of “did have a lot” past vs present tense

pg 24, “how was it” instead of “how’s it” present vs past tense

pg 25, “the story was” instead of “the story is” past vs present tense. Also “remember the part” instead of “remembered the part“ past vs present tense

pg, 28, “you once had” instead of “you once have” present vs past tense. Also “with a radio” instead of “with radio“

pg, 31, “through body armour“ instead of “through a body armour“. this is because armour is made up of multiple pieces and “a” suggests a single thing.
Also stash is a singular not plural word so something like “that’s a huge stash” would make more sense

pg 32, “by the minute“ instead of ”by the minutes“, as she’s referring to each individual minute that passes. Also “she does love” instead of “she did love” past vs present tense

pg 36, “perfume she uses” instead of “perfume she use”. Also “why does that pigeon” instead of “why is that pigeon“

pg 37, “it’s solid evidence“ instead of “it’s a solid evidence”

pg, 45 I’m not sure exactly what’s being said here, “you doubted yourself and unable to pull the trigger in the end”. If it said “you doubted yourself and WERE unable to pull the trigger”. It would mean they’re strictly talking about the past. If it said “you doubt yourself and ARE unable to pull the trigger“ that would mean their talking about the present

pg 46 “smoke and shadow are” instead of “smoke and shadow is”. As they are two things. Also ”if you can’t” instead of “if you couldn’t” past vs present tense. And “he still had” instead of “he still got” as the helicopter is no longer hidden.

pg 47, “don’t think you can” instead of “don’t think you could” as it’s present tense

pg 51, ”wearing body armour” instead of “wearing a body armour“

pg 54, ”comes back instead of “come back”

keep up the great work! It’s really appreciated. Easily 80% or more of the mistakes are past vs present tense or plural vs singular. These are some of the easiest mistakes to make in english. please keep at it. Thanks

Aww, guess I still make a lot of mistakes though. Will fix them as soon as I'm able to! Thanks again, these are treasures for me.

EDIT:
Pg 14 -> I'm actually trying to make Clice's words feel more informal here (though then I realized Clice is talking with Mei Ling's chief, and thus changed it). Can I normally keep it? Like saying "Oh well, can't be helped!"

Pg 45 -> Ah yes, seems like the problem is a recurring one (until the end of this chapter), so I'll take the present tense version of it, thanks!

Pg 46 -> Got it. I'm also making a change on the wording from "a part of you" into "a part of your life" and "then you're no different than being dead!" into "then how are you any different from being dead?". Since this is a reference to chapter 14 previously, I'll update that one too soon.

Done fixing them. Anyway, thanks again for taking your time checking these up! Now I'm fired up to make the next chapter as mistake-free as possible. Hopefully there will be eventually a chapter that you could just read as it is without needing to correct it, but if there's still a mistake... sorry beforehand, but I would be needing your help again then XD.

 

[Benjansss]

Aww, guess I still make a lot of mistakes though. Will fix them as soon as I'm able to! Thanks again, these are treasures for me.

EDIT:
Pg 14 -> I'm actually trying to make Clice's words feel more informal here (though then I realized Clice is talking with Mei Ling's chief, and thus changed it). Can I normally keep it? Like saying "Oh well, can't be helped!"

Pg 45 -> Ah yes, seems like the problem is a recurring one (until the end of this chapter), so I'll take the present tense version of it, thanks!

Pg 46 -> Got it. I'm also making a change on the wording from "a part of you" into "a part of your life" and "then you're no different than being dead!" into "then how are you any different from being dead?". Since this is a reference to chapter 14 previously, I'll update that one too soon.

Done fixing them. Anyway, thanks again for taking your time checking these up! Now I'm fired up to make the next chapter as mistake-free as possible. Hopefully there will be eventually a chapter that you could just read as it is without needing to correct it, but if there's still a mistake... sorry beforehand, but I would be needing your help again then XD.

pg 14, yes if it’s more informal thats fine. I’m happy to help.

 

[Siddasloth]

Its insane how they treat Clice. Why don't they just turn her back into a man? Surely its less trouble than her going rogue every 0.3 seconds lmao

 

[renseiryuu]

Its insane how they treat Clice. Why don't they just turn her back into a man? Surely its less trouble than her going rogue every 0.3 seconds lmao

Logical reasoning: They did seem to value female agents more since they're rare to have around.

Optimistic reasoning: Clice works better as a female (apparently she's more focused on work) than as a male (spent his time fooling around instead).

True reasoning: We know the series would end had she changed back to man XD.

 

[1234muse]

Logical reasoning: They did seem to value female agents more since they're rare to have around.

Optimistic reasoning: Clice works better as a female (apparently she's more focused on work) than as a male (spent his time fooling around instead).

True reasoning: We know the series would end had she changed back to man XD.

it's stated in the start somewhere that clice really starts to take off as a girl because she can't chase skirts as much

 

[BreadBunny]

it's stated in the start somewhere that clice really starts to take off as a girl because she can't chase skirts as much

Yeah even with Clice going rogue in between every mission she's probably still causing less of a disturbance than when he was going off on dates with one of his dozen girlfriends back when he was still a man.

 

[Terrate]

Clice really got INT checked on this chapter lol.