My Lolita Brother - Ch. 18 - Of One Mind...

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No idea why this is focusing on action so much its clearly not its strong suit
 
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it's back, thanks for the translations! but yeah this works better as a comedy than as a weird magical brother digimon.
 
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Should've just gone for scenario type writing instead of going full linear storytelling. It's that idea that cohesion is law in these comedies that kills them and makes it harder to write every subsequent chapter, because eventually you run out of stops on a one track train. Be the car of storytelling, and change lanes every now and again.

The concept was mildly entertaining too, kinda lame it turned out like this
 

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